here i go,
i will talk about what's bothering me...
the thoughts
the speeding ideas
the incessant flow of instability
the continous anxiety
the neverending race to finish sane,
i am loosing today
as i look back to see how much i've run,
i notice, i haven't moved much
i was here yesterday
it bothers me
it bothers me
it upset me until the maddening point
i want to explode my mind
feed it dynamite and
watch it go...i used to pretend well
i was the queen of acting
this bothers me,
i can't feign being happy
i can't feign being relaxed
it
bothers
me
this is my life
Author notes
Kristy
A contest entry
- Search Your Feelings by Lukey.
825 points, ended October 19, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Any Merit? Any Constructive Criticism? Any Thought? Meaningful comments please.
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I like how your style makes the poem seem like a rushed and incessant flow of thought. How there are so many things running through your mind at once, you don't know whether to focus on one, or try and soak them all in. The significance of being bothered, of trying to pretend that you're cool with everything. I can relate to that. Nice job, and good luck in the contest.
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Thanks for the points and hm
best wishes,
Kristy
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Dude nice pic lol
Thank you. This makes me know I achieved my goal... I wanted the reader to lose breath and feel the rush of being bothered
Best wishes,
Kristy
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Wise-Profound...
A reflective psychoanalytical picture of a "bothered" state of mind. A depicting processing of a soul that is finding its way.
I am impressed with the striking thoughts' capacity of the lines of "bothered" . A powerful poetic life saver.
In gratitude and admiration,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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Very psychoanalytical... I tend to do that, I look through my mind like a map and loose myself. I feel things and its a good thing I have writing and teleliberty to express it with
Thank you
With gratefulness and whole-hearted appreciation,
Kristy.
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