It's in the rain
That's running down my skin
It's in the pain
That's dripping from my chin
Droplets form
In reflection we see
Nothing warm
Just seperation of we
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Author notes
This write is in response to a picture I saw in a contest recently posted by a friend of mine,,, Hikari Lady,,, http://allpoetry.com/contest/2462197 This is the Photo http://forbiddensorrow.deviantart.com/art/It-s-In-The-Rain-59593476 It brought me feelings of seperation,,, the rain droplets soooo close together but still seperated enough to keep them from connecting and growing with the droplets so closely surrounding them,,, much like people,,,, I was too late to enter the contest,,, it closed 2 days ago,,, but thought id add this to my list of poems,,,, thanks for reading,,, and hopefully commenting,,,Michael
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I like this! Good, with depth, a certain haunting feeling too... made me feel a parallel of rain and teardrops too... good emotion. Great write.
Blessings,
Amy
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lovely
said so much with so few words, thats a powerful talent. great write.
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michael...i love this...and its sentiment...and it echoes so much of the feelings i have had too
nice write my friend
T
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SO DEEPLY MOVING!!!!
The rain sure does bring out the sadness one may have and escalates it !
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Ohhhhhhh!! You should have told me, I'd have reopened the contest just for you to enter.
This was so beautiful and I loved the simple rhyme and the saddness in it. It's very different from your usual writes and I actually liked it so much. A wonderful take on the picture, uncle. Wish you had entered.
Love
~Noor
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interesting but simple. simple rhyming is fun for me sometimes, for some reason I'm always into this style while it's raining...
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