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Calling

Why do I feel so far removed,
Just watching as they pass?
Pitying their empty lives,
But blaming them. Alas...

'Twas they who settled for the earth
Although the breezes blew,
Beckoning them all to fly.
Yes, certainly, they knew

They had a choice. But tell me, why?
And how does one ignore
All the voices whispering,
"You could be so much more?"

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10-12-09

I would rather look back and regret the things I've done, rather than regret the things I never did.

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  • camus gold member
    October 27

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    I share your sense of separation from people as I too often feel "far removed" as I watch people pass. You refer to their futile lives since they "settled for the earth" when the breezes "beckoned them" to higher plains. Sometimes, I love to be shallow and superficial but what really matters to me is that my vision is enriched enough to offer me a choice. Your poem conveys effectively the haunting voices that taunt and worry us about our lack of achievement when the potential is there to attain greater heights.
    On a different note, I LOVE your passion for animals. You're such a sensitive lady. Wish there were more like you. Tony


  • dame de la riviere
    October 23

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    An interesting poem and still more interesting sentiment in your author's note. I like the form of this piece and the diction. Nicely penned. , Dannie


  • Amera gold member
    October 18

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    This is a poem that is a true joy to recite aloud. As always, your meter is perfect and in this poem the meaning is prolific. Bravo!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • ZachP gold member
    October 15

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    Oh, Ida, this resonates so very deeply in my heart.

    I've been struggling with a lot of my regrets; for things I never did while in High School. But I'm trying to look beyond, and to see God's heart in these matters . . . which I suppose is the best thing I can do.

    Thank you for offering up this beautiful poem. You don't get enough reads/comments by far.

    Love,
    Zach.


  • Tqop
    October 14
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    I really loved the first line:
    Why do I feel so far removed

    When I read that I think: Why do I feel so out of place.

    Great job!


  • Iliad Keys
    October 13

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    Good thoughts, good thoughts... Interesting that you chose to write a poem looking into the interior of others, because poets so often gaze into themselves. I like the point of view in this.


  • Nomadic Prince
    October 13
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    Potential, something a lot of people ignore because they're comfortable with the mediocre. well written. -CC

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