Grasping for life,
I'm on the edge.
Need an outlet!!!
I want to scream
I want to do something
to let myself know
I'm still alive!
Cause I'm so close
to being dead inside!
I would
beat myself,
cut myself,
or
burn myself.
But those things
take too much energy.
I'll just eat.
And eat.
Until I get fat.
Then I'll just stop.
Eating is too much work
anyways.
I need a job.
And these thoughts
creep up in my mind,
to sell my body.
Its been violated before,
whats it matter now?
If I got money then I could
run far away.
I don't want to stay.
I want to freeze to death
on a street.
My heart has already frozen over.
One day
I'll make it out okay.
But right now
I have no faith.
No money.
No desire to stay.
I'm feeling hopeless.
I'm desperate
for someone,
anyone that lives near me,
to understand.
I'm messed up.
I should not have these thoughts.
I need help.
But for another eight months
I cannot get it.
I'm stuck suffering
in my silence.
Author notes
Its not good. I don't care. But then again, what do I care about now?...
Comments
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This was great. The flow was choppy but that worked in favour of the poem. A very enjoyable write
The jumping from idea to idea gave a voice of sheer desperation of the writer which was awesome. The language was also great and with the ending of in my silence gave such a final tone. It caused the reader to imagine someone broken who had yelled out this poem but then quietly turned away. An awesome write.
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Yes it is good!
Something that really adds to the excitement of it is how short the sentences/lines are. That makes me want to keep reading more and more. Plus, I love how you go from one solution to another so quickly. Normally that doesnt' work, but since you were on one topic (how to escape), it did. Very nice job!

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Thank you very much!
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