Wine Keg
by Star of Atlantis
munks sit in the bottom of an old dried up wine keg.
they speak philosaphy in echos and secrets drifting up the spiral staircase
reality is tarnished on the out side so the steps are never used
except to read a book among the curves of the snail as it turns climbing above.
we have been here long
from cradle to the grave
forgeting to indulge in what this old keg saves
some where in the memory of time
is but the sent of wine
drunk on all thats holy
not lisening in the deep barral
to the broken entangelments of yesterday or the words of GOD
they cant remember the way out... or in...
long brfore the sin they dropped it
somewhere in this dream they lost it
life...
meaning...
fragments...
wine!
A contest entry
- Fall's Image Prompt by Cynthia Gaines.
2400 points, ended November 8, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please be very detailed in your coments and give me plenty to learn about how you view my piece. thank you.
Comments
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Thought-provoking...
Thank you for your profound entry!! This poem offers much food for thought... I'm not sure, but I think in line 4, the word "climbing" is misspelled... or maybe you meant it that way - with the intixicating contents of the keg... 
Thanks again for sharing your poem, I'm wishing you all the best in the contest!! Take care, and keep it flowing, O WIse One... 
& 
Cyn
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thank you for the coment
glad you liked it. i didnt intend the spelling error... i will go fix it. i have dislexia so when i do mispell things sometimes the spell checker doesnt catch it so i am very thankful when someone else does. that one threw me off actually and i had to go see how i spelled it... i think it was just a fat fingered typo lol. again thank you for the comment
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I like the way this prompt inspired you, which, I guess, is to day that I like this poem
You've used great imagery, thought, and flow.
Best of luck in the contest!
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glad you liked this one... i couldnt just look at it as it is some basement in some gothic yet interesting place. i thought it more fun to spin it with a bit of a different feel.. lets see what the judges think i guess. and i have a contest that i have entered and have been asked to invite some one to do the contest to so here is the link come give me some compitition that would be fun dont you think? http://allpoetry.com/contest/show/2463041
also i am running a contest that if you havent entered yet you darn well better cause i like your creativity. i dont have the link for that but its the only active contest i have on at the moment and so you can just go to my page and click on it if you want to. thank you again for the comment. when i am not on a library computer that is runnig out of time more quickly than i would like i will have to go dive into more of your work
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