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If You Were With Me...

I have a Crush,
When ever I was with you, I'd always blush
Giving you hugs, made my heart rush
Always on my mind so I'm never bored
If I could be with you, You'd always be adored
Giving you my heart, As a loving reward
The most valuable thing, I could afford
You Cause a spark in my heart, from the very start
Lets go out to dinner, Not an ala-carte
Sitting face-to-face, As our love departs
After dinner, I'll take you to a room
Kiss you tonight, While we're under the moon
Our feelings for each other will start to consume
Chocolate turtle doves, It's a sign of my love
I'll make a heart out of a cloud from up above
Wanna hold your hand and kiss you in public
Making you smile, I'm sure you'll love it
I think about you, Can't get enough of it
A sad broken heart, I can relate
I wanna take you out on a Romantic Date
How about a movie yeah, That sounds great
So what do you say, Will you give me a chance?
I'll take you somewhere special, So we can slow-dance
Playing Soft music, As our Feelings Enhance

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  • PhotoTwilight92
    October 18
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    Oh my gosh Kevin I absultly loved it. your the sweetest guy ever

  • deniselovinhim
    October 17
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    i loved it..
    Thiss girl is verry lucky! =] <3

  • awe so sweet!! who ever she is would be lucky!! hahah


  • Poetic Obscenity
    October 13
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    Love it.

    It's a great write as always, The flow is impeccable.
    My only concern..is it doesn't seem..finished.

    Keep it going, really.