Lost dreams floating within the mist
Memories that fade with time
Words written upon the wind
Sad stories told with rhyme
Misty visions of the heart
In the darkness of the soul
Things that might have been
When childhood was stole
Who now walks within my heart
Who has he now become
The boy hidden in the dreams
Lost from the days bright sun
Please tell me what you think
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Hoodwink 143
You have been hoodwinked because someone cared about you. Sometimes dreams can get lost but you can always make new ones.
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Hood-Wink!
I quite like that the first word is repeated as the first word of the final line; there is something about that that adds to the 'oomph' feel of this very touching poem, though I have an urge to call it a story
Wonderfully penned.
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
Apologies on the late Hoodwink!
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HOODWINKED ! ! !
A nostalgic sad reminiscence of a lost childhood nicely
rhymed and flowed and using some nice well chosen imagery and giving food for thought
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HOODWINKED!
Very sad and reflective poem about what has disappeared along with the childhood, it is a poem that makes the reader think alot.
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Very Good
This is a well written short poem that is evocative of the sadness and loss of stolen childhood, and achieves it's purpose very well. You have gotten in touch with that hidden part and brought it to light, so perhaps healing can take place, not just in yourself, but the reader as well. That I believe is the true purpose of poetry, to communicate and bring forth dark things to light, even though sad, and it's a good thing. I especially like the line "Who now walks within my heart, Who has he now become" because it shows you recognize such loss is a transformation. Very good writing; thanks so much for sharing with us.
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i feel the emotions touching the heart and sigh of sadness builds within...lost dreams from days gone by allows this reader to see...niaish John for sharing yours with me
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