A blistered heart on a flickering wall
Shadows hiding truth, honesty
Clawing for a way out
Desperation, fear mounts
Is there a way out? Why trapped
What did I do to deserve it
Anger, pain wells
All the backstabbing, insults, lies
Building and clawing at the heart
As it starts bleeding
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Its good. GREAT WRITE
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o-o Wow.
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When a poem is filled with raw emotion, everyone feels the lingering affects.. nicely done.
Love,
Stacy
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This poem feels sad and angry at the same time.The wording is wonderful and the metaphors are wonderful hun.I enjoyed this write and I look forward to reading more of your poems
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Awww beautiful write. Can feel the desperation and sadness in this, I know very well the feeling. Love the ending, the building and clawing at the heart. And its left bleeding with no light in sight. (hugs).
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Wow, this is very strong and deep... i cant even begin to explain it.
Bravo.
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Awe how tragic....
This piece makes me feel the anguish of betrayal and the loathing of verbal abuse and deception { feelings I have become far too familiar with in life } The desperation one feels when they are alone and have no one to trust is a terrifying and devastating emotion. It can either compel us to seek an escape route that leads us away from our misery { through suicide or self-mutilation , drug use or other addictions that distract us from our pain, or through transcendence by finding our inner strength and overcoming our downfalls } OR it can lead us to seek some means of revenge against those who have wronged us or to seek redemption and forgiveness from ourselves for allowing ourselves to place trust in those not worthy of it and getting burned in the process. I love the power and strength behind your words and I love how you depict the situation....leaving room for interpretation - so that we may make use of our own imaginations. You've impressed me with your ability to express emotions { in your writing } with such mind-blowing force!
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Wow, VERY strong emotions you've penned here.
Nicely done! Short and to the point, always enjoyable
bravo and best of wishes
♥kate
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Well, it was really unique thats for sure. But it seems there must be something missing from them. It tells a story but it leaves it dull and blank. There is little imagination in it.
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alot of of emotion
it tells a story not seen
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This piece you have here, had some real strong emotions and feelings flowing in it. I enjoyed reading this fine piece of work you have. Keep up the good work.
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this is a great poem by GarnetAndBlack
A blistered heart on a flickering wall
Shadows hiding truth, honesty
Clawing for a way out
Desperation, fear mounts
Is there a way out? Why trapped
What did I do to deserve it
Anger, pain wells
All the backstabbing, insults, lies
Building and clawing at the heart
As it starts bleeding -
interesting poem for sure, seems to hold a lot of meaning since there is a ton of emotion in it, onto the constructive criticism it seems to short to me like it ended way to soon im left with a lingering for more
Lovely work
Lucian"
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This is neat
This was really good Scott. I'm glad to see you took an idea and went with it. Another great write.
~Nicky
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