I look into your beautiful brown eyes
and see nothing
where once there was a spark
there is an empty pool
And yet I will not leave you...
because I love to feel loved
Even if it is all just a geme to me.
I know I am a user,
but can you put me to blame?
when your muddy eyes
look at me with such a sweet awe
I know I could not hurt you
how I have been hurt before.
So I will let you love me
and I will look into
your eyes and smile
like a child
playing with mud
Author notes
PROMPT FOUR
Come to bed, don't make me sleep alone
Couldn't hide the emptiness, you let it show
Never wanted it to be so cold
Just didn't drink enough to say you love me
(Lithium, By Evanescence)
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Even if it is all just a geme to me.
~ "geme" should be "game", perhaps?
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Itz lik lookin into an eyes of an angel lik ppl say. . . where u know u were full of love & happyness well it all drifted lik a bad odor in da air. Itz hard 2 hurt sme1 u want 2 stay with or use, but why do blame even though in ur head it still feelz lik game. LIke a child wantin 2 play with mud and itz been 4eva sense dat kid went out 2 play. So itz lik u know how hard it wuz gttin hurt so u dnt want 2 do da same thing, so u let'em love u, hold u. Juz 2 hve fun & feel loved & even wanted in dz unwanted world we all call HOME??!!!!!!
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The similie of mud used in this poem was really good.
"So I will let you love me
and I will look into
your eyes and smile
like a child
playing with mud"
Was worded very eloquently and described the act of being with someone, maybe even loving them, but settling by not being in love with them. I really enjoyed and related to this!
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