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Tree leaves and pavements.

 

 

 

 

 

skin is shallow, yet somehow soft and sits where it fits (and even where it doesn't) while bones wish for worms and a plethora of peace.

 

i collect myself everywhere and even though these lips lack life, i can still last for hours whilst everything changes:

 

i watch as thoughts tie themselves inside my throat, to crush roars and chip away words that fall as too-white skies within a void of rain clouds and atmosphere.  And i drag my own perceived ugliness upright, whilst asking time whether i purposefully plunge myself into corners, or whether reality intentionally lands on its knees for every occasion anyway.

 

My dreams drip south, to swim as sea amongst ten touches of a hue-harmed self and i play me pathetic, whilst daring my distress to depart this scene.

 

i appear alive and a little unwaxed, yet i am washed and for the most part, i work...yet still i shroud myself in going, clicking switches inside a skeleton of secrets, while veins control core's calamities, voicing their disdain at my transparent famine

 

and i can hear positions...so i hold them.

 

i can lift my torso slightly and breathe through juts of facts and details, so i always know what to say and so facades can stay and the world can leave me be...

 

i am piece of paper when weather falls wet and you can already see my words dissolving letter by letter, poem by precious poem...until eventually, there'll be nothing left.  just paper.

 

luck won't live here and worth won't stay and i'll finally fade within the frames of bony appearances and still, you will be endeared

 

because blue-eyes will always tell tales of true love--

 

the ones where even experts

survive.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • ShaShay
    October 25

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    Enjoyable read. Sadness and joy seem to be struggling somehow, just a feeling I got. You have penned a wonderful piece and should win accolades. I admire your talent for prose. It is something I'm working on improving. Not that I think you need it but I wish you luck in the contest.
    Sharon


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    October 14

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    and I can hear positions ... so I hold them.

    The emotion reeled in from this piece is strong and finds me questioning motive, as well as action. Sometimes, we do what we must - simply to survive.
    Your prose is strong and forthright. A superb take on this prompt - so very well done. I loved this. ~Pamela


  • S.Hunt
    October 14

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    very poetic. feelings of sadness, and even a wish to escape life resonates. My favorite phrase in the poem reads - "luck won't live here and worth won't stay".
    In my opinion the title doesn't reflect the message the poem conveys, I would change the title to "Fading Away". Good Luck!


    • Laura Lamarca gold member
      October 14
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      my title is totally related to the metaphors and meanings of this piece. i believe titles should be a separate entity, a separate thought that metaphorically ties in with the body of what is written...i hate it when people pull 3 words out of the text of a poem and label it "title" - it shows a total lack of creativity, in my opinion.
      i'm glad you enjoyed reading this piece and must thank you for both your comment and the applause.

      laura.


  • smitaanand
    October 14

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    The words are lovely with sadness, depth, emoton and ethereal beauty .The imagery and metaphorr are delightfully painted in dextrous strokes of an unhailed genius.This is reallky captivating and my heart goes out for the unshed tears that are reflected within the realms of this superb write.The words are alive and breathing and burning with pain like dying embers with orange glows.This has got an honest appeal about it.Glad I read this one it is a real gem so inspiring...


  • brochoppie
    October 13

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    This is great! I can really picture what you are saying and feeling. It is very sad and beautiful at the same time. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing with us!


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    October 13

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    I think brown eyes can tell tales of true love too...
    Great imagery in this write!
    Pam


  • TGeiger
    October 13

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    wow paints a very vivid image in my head. Its like your a painter with those words. Impressive indeed.

  • Mighty Moe
    October 13

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    The imagery in this piece is truly amazing. There are so many phrases that took my breath away. Awesome!


  • Summer Daze silver member
    October 13

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    Your prose reads like poetry. With different formatting it would be beautiful freeverse. I enjoy the outstanding imagery and metaphor. I am learning to write by reading your work.

  • This is one of those proses that just move and move, progress and progress. You built it up and the ending left a powerful impact...and a touching one too. I love this.

  • SoulWhispher
    October 13

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    Most moving piece of poetry, that walks the hidden pathways of the soul, great write, love John

  • This was very well done.

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