In the very beginning each flower had a reason
Before there was sinning emotions ran wild
Blossoms were spinning and each had a season
Each new emotion with wonder beguiled
The flower with devotion had charge o’er the rest
Some plants had the notion to act like a child
I mentioned the flower that you might have guessed
With the strength of a tower and ruled over all
The rose had that power and truly was blessed
It seems times have changed and the flowers seem small
They are simply arranged it’s like botanic treason
The flowers are estranged and they cannot recall
In the very beginning each flower had a reason
Blossoms were spinning and each had a season
Author notes
Terza Rima sonnet
Prompt:
Love is like the wild rose-briar;
Friendship like the holly-tree.
The holly is dark when the rose-briar blooms,
But which will bloom most constantly?
Emily Bronte, Love and Friendship
In a list
A contest entry
- The Masked Sonneteer's Monthly Challenge October 2009 - The Terza Rima Sonnet by Masked Sonneteer.
1000 points, ended November 8, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments:
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I think this one is over my head. I like it but I don't really understand it. Oh, to be cursed with an IQ of only 160! I'll have you explain it to me someday. The meter was good.
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Excellent
You never cease to amaze with your gift for form. Such an incredible write. And so deserving of the gold. Congratulations
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An excellent use of the form and prompt. The internal cross rhyming brought a depth to the piece and allowed the rhythm to convey the emotion of the write.
Nicely done
Z
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Very well developed take on the prompt. I am particularly partial to Emily Bronte's poems and you have taken this in a lovely direction. I like your use of internal rhymes giving the whole piece an added tempo almost a dance like quality. The Terza Rima sonnet can be a bit of a challenge to write effectively - you met the challenge and surpassed it - nicely done.
Ceridwen's Soul
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Superb in every resepect, with exceptionally fine meter... it is enough to make one sigh with joy. A wonderful write, and I did so love it.
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Wow, loved the flow and the rhyme of this, really amazing....
You have serious talent sis... I applaud you
Huge
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Wow...I just noticed the internal rhyme in every stanza,
beginning, sinning and spinning
emotion, devotion and notion
changed, arranged and estranged
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Thanks again, I’m thrilled that the internal rhyme wasn’t instantaneously recognizable. I added that poetic device to enhance or round out the flow when recited aloud.
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Hi Poetess,
Once again you have demonstrated the beauty and natural flow of the sonnet in all its many forms.
Of course, I checked out the Terza Rima form. I guessed it was Italian for third and rhyme and this quickly led me to Dante’s Paradise Lost which is written in this form. I was fascinated by its strange mysticism and complicated metaphor... so now I have another book to read.
As ever, you have spun so many ideas into every line of this poem that I could write an essay describing the thoughts it engenders.
My favourite reflection is on line two...before sin became fashionable there was no need to repress our emotions because they were all good and joyous and there was no hate, greed, or envy.
Thanks for posting this,
Kind regards, Peter
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Oh Peter! Thank you so much for not only this comment but for being my loyal friend and reader. I’m not surprised that you would be interested in the Terza Rima and Dante because I think you are one of the most intelligent members of this web site. I also love that masterpiece, in fact if you recall, I have written my own interpretation of canto3 in my poem “Gate of Hell, canto 3”. You also gave me a raving review on that poem. Once again, thank you.
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Woo~~~ hooo~~~
Oh My Word You make this look so easy...
I think Sonnet and get a throbbing on
both sides of my noggin
Now do You teach Sonnets?
I know AP has classes etc~
Heck You could teach every class
You Good
Adore Your Interpretation of the prompt!
Keep that quill dancing Beautiful
Thank You for sharing Your Talent...
Woot
Best wishes in the contest~
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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Wow.. now this is impressive Sis! The form is outstanding.. I love the internal as well as external rhyme!! You amaze me... and the content is perfectly done for the prompt.
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Amazing take on the prompt
Your form "rocks" as always
Both literally and metaphorically brilliant
"In the very beginning each flower had a reason
Blossoms were spinning and each had a season"
Very well penned hun
I'll say it again, you are amazing in so many ways
Wish you the best in the contest
Much love my friend
David
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You are master of sonnets and I so love when you do penn them!!! This was wonderful
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Lovely! I enjoyed the unique take on the prompt!
Always a pleasure to read you!
Best wishes,
K
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You have done an excellent job with this Prompt! It reallly made me think. You are very clever and the variaty of your poems Amaizes me as I page through your work today. Big round of applause for this Perfectly penned piece!
Love
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Becks
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Quite a beautifully whimsicle take on the prompt.
I don't know why I entered this contest with you. You truly have a way with form that is stunning, and it's really not what I'm good at
. I love the ending.
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congrats on gold
this was truly a pretty piece
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In the very beginning each flower had a reason
Blossoms were spinning and each had a season
Stands out on its own but with this poem it makes for something golden, keep it flowing -
And now behold the Rose was borne to a new and profound tenemant.
Excellent poetry as always from a most talented and extremely generous poetess.
Thank you Amera for always showing the way and helping a muse come to life.
Amera
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just beautiful sweetheart with a flow as soft as a rose pedal it's self...every flower does have a message it brings and still can be felt on a whispering wind winner for sure
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A cute and lively terza rima which explores the prompt in a way all your own. Your poetry needs no suggestions because you always have the perfect rhyme and meter. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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Every comment before me is right, I agree and second the motion... if there is one.
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excellent
Always love your reads sweetie
I just posted another new one too
Would love for you to drop by
Best of luck in the contest
Hugs
Susan~~~~
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Such a beautiful prompt to inspire another beautiful sonnet from your pen ... just perfect.
All the best in the contest.
Love
Sue
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I love the flowers personified, in their society, some are estranged, some are childish, and now in my mind, I am attaching traits to them all...pugnacious petunias that bloom into fall. etc.
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very lovely form and quite a lovely imagery behind it too
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I keep telling you, you're the best sonnet writer on the site, but do you listen ?
supercalifragilisticexpialidocious
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Indeed so buddy
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Beautiful write significant to the prompt you used. Amazing as always. Blessings.
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And once again, The Form Queen amazes all withe the talent she shows! This is truly amazing sis!! I love it! You really did an amazing job with this one! And your take on the prompt is simply stunning!!!
Best of luck in this contest!!!
and love
Nyetta
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Nicely done, Sis.
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~Some plants had the notion to act like a child~~
I love what you do.
Joe
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Amera, this is a lovely poem you have penned here, so perfect for the prompt.
I love the form, I'm useless at sonnets myself so do admire your skill in writing them and you write them so well. I love the second stanza, 'Each had the notion to act like a child' fabulous!
Good Luck in the contest.
Love Lu x
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