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Wake up

Morning filters in,
promising
another date-

Sleeping babies,
gently stirred awake
with stories,
doses of kisses.

Steps prancing around
faster with each ticking second,
each sunrise I forget
the naughtiness
gleaming behind smiles.

Author notes

prompt:


Write an everyday moment; a snippet of your life made poetry.


Any doubts...3 kids waking up in morning together ... think abt it

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  • retribusive
    November 3

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    this is really good, i chuckled a bit there at the end. a very great write with good flow and style. best of luck in the contest!


  • Venugopal gold member
    October 31

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    so true for young mother. Poem out of reality


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    October 13

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    that's true the innocence of children can often mask their evil lol


  • sweet arrival gold member
    October 13

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    now this brought a smile to my face. having babysat kids is different, but my best friend is 1 of 8 kids and when i visit her, it is AWESOME. kids are so full of everything... they give love so easily, they dont hold back what they think, blurting out some things that make you want to fall on the floor and laugh. and the smiles do cover those wheels that are thinking... before the thoughts are put into action. thanks for the smile

    • crimsondew
      October 13
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      You are very welcome....Yes Kids are just so full of life..

      Keep up the smile

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