I long to be immersed in serenity’s hold
To reach the one place where all my dreams can be told
I yearn to reach that plain where I am free at last
Where I worry not about future, now or past…
For I have reached the deepest bliss
And touched the face of God
For that great place my heart does miss
With brook and shepherd’s rod
And in that place I long to stay
And make it my keep
I long to fly far far away
With transcendence by sleep
I desire to be there now
With no one else but me
Yet if only I could know how
To sail across that sea
I grow tired of many things
Of broken clocks and glass
In weary keys my heart still sings
About things that have passed
Although our world grows darker still
And fog clouds all our sights
We must make it our only will
To seek that which is right
For skeleton bricks lie around
Of truth that once did live
Truth was killed with a moaning sound
We could no longer give
But we can reach that place to stay
With the morals we keep
We can find that peace far away
Through transcendence by sleep…
Author notes
I have had the idea of a poem with the title "Transcendence By Sleep" for over a year now, which was sparked by Kingdom Hearts, but obviously this poem has nothing to do with KH. One night I longed to go to sleep because all the stress melts away. As I wrote I remembered how fed up I am with the corruption of this world and used many metaphors in the poem to illustrate things that need to be fixed or things that cannot be. I realized too, that the poem itself is a metaphor for death, the ultimate sleep, that unites us with God in the end. Therefore, the title transcendence by sleep is extremely appropriate. As you could tell the poem is littered with literary devices such as metaphor, allusion and symbolism.
This poem was written on 10/5/09 at 12:22AM
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knocked me for a loop this did, i enjoyed the whole poem and how i speaks truth, i have no idea what that mean but i guess i am saying that it is an Honest poem in the way it talks to you, i think, keep it flowing
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well done
very impressive
i particularly enjoyed the idea of sleep releasing us from reality through dreams and it seemed as though there was and underlying idea that through the way we live our lives we can thereby make our dreams a reality
all in all a very well written poem and quite an enjoyable read
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I love that title...and your true devotion is clearly evident through your words --- this is truly a beautiful work and I'm sure that, also in appreciation, God smiles down upon you from Above
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amazing! one of the best I've read in a long time!
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that was beautiful. thats all i can think of to say. you have reason to be proud. very good job.
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Yes--one of your best--a strong concept, and extensively developed. The transcendence of sleep, as a departure from the world in which we normally live, is especially brought out in dreams, which were, according to the Scriptures, sometimes used to bring communications from God, with whom we will be when we enter that "final sleep."
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Beautiful, serene and yes, reading it gave me a yearning.just to be in a perfect place.Your style is deep, descriptive and also captivating.That every emotion makes you want to read more.
I would want to talk about it forever...I lack words.
It is that good.I wish I had points to feature it for you.but am gonna recommend it for AP's front page.It's lovely.
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As always, brilliant write! I'm running out of things to say about your writing skills without sounding redundant! ^_^ But I agree, this is definitely one of your best. Even at.....12:56 in the morning (where I am) I can read this poem, perhaps not pick up on the literal meanings in your poem, however I can enjoy it none the less. Wonderfully written and very engaging. Fantastic write
Sincerely,
Toddy
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Very melancholy, and I assume it is about suicide? I don't share your view of our world growing darker. I think that people are becoming more enlightened about pollution, and corruption, and there are many people (living) who are ready to do something about it, however small. A new power station close to my home, has just been cancelled due to public outcry and the involvement of Greenpeace. It would have been on a site which is highly populated by wild birds, some of which are only seen in this part of the world. Your execution of the poem was faultless, and flowed very well, and showed deep emotion, though. Well done for such excellent expression. Gwen x
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i know how you fell
at times i long to sleep and dream and transend to other demensions
i realy love this poem
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This is a beautiful poem! I loved the choice of words and metaphors, your writing brought me in on the first line and I could feel your words the whole way through. Im not a religious person at all, but I could totally relate to what you were saying. Its funny, while I was reading it, I was thinking how thats how I feel most nights, I just want to sleep to make my stress, worries, and endless thoughts go away, then I read your notes and that is why/when you wrote this. Thank you so much for sharing and I look forward to reading more from you!
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Really cool! Its funny I read the notes about the kindom hearts thing and while I was reading the poem it made me think of kingdom hearts!!! How strange is that! So I would say job well done. EDIT: Of course I know the poem has nothing to do with KHs, just I thought it was funny that it made me think of that whole world and fantasy type setting.
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The Only criticism I have to voice here is in the first stanza, where I believe it would flow better if you didn't include the "my" in "my dreams be told". Other than that it describes a fantastical dream and I love everything about it: the metaphors, style, everythig works very well!
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Breathtaking!!
Absolutely Brilliant. To take something as simple as sleeping; something some people take for granted and turn it into this wonderful masterpiece is astounding. The imagery is stunning and paints quite a picture. Wonderfully done!
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Nice poem
Interesting imagery. Religious imagery isn't really my thing, but you seem to wear it well. Keep penning fellow poet.
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