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the reaper carves a flute in the dark of night




heaven showed no favor in
my birth,
the world held no objections,
no honor either.


I chattered for teeth and sang,
welcoming myself, for gods
always die and my voice
echoed loud enough.


heaven never spoke, man
and his lies, innumerable,
so hell became the
welcoming abode, my hole
for many years, but as
the mire filled my throat,
I clutched onto the
shining blades of grass, that
near to the blood edge,  & rose


the countless stars greeted
me, the rocks from where
I was nurtured filled my belly,                    

                            weighted

to naked bright earth.

 

 

 

Author notes

" Death is an immersion in primordial time. That is why, on the one hand, it is so appealing, and on the other so terrifying. The nigredo [ dark night of the soul ] calls for a spiritual death. Many mistake this longing as a longing for a physical death. ... One must not open one's veins to such an insistence, but should kindle instead the fire of one's heart."
-" The Alchemical Death : Notes from a Journal " by Charles Ponce

 

 

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  • JinSays gold member
    November 12

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    but as
    the mire filled my throat,
    I clutched onto the
    shining blades of grass, that
    near to the blood edge, & rose

    Again, you have this resoluteness, this feeling of inner change inside the words, and though they appear to be few and far between, I cannot help but think in different measures, everything that I've seen, yet not seen before. I know Azlyn, I was in this contest. I dont make it a practice to read the others, maybe I should. This poem is gorgeous.
    love,
    jin


  • spiritual wolf
    November 3

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    always die and my voice
    echoed loud enough.

    that was a very powerful line as were the rest but that one stood out to me most. you did a wonderful job in picking each word bc they all feel hand picked and were in their place. amazing!


  • Xianaria gold member
    October 27

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    Well done!
    Congrats on being Featured,
    Oct. 13, 2009! ~ Tim
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  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 27

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    My.....your vivid imagery keeps one fascinated right through to the end of the piece....You have captured the prompt and run with it in such an amazing penning...Most impressed...I will be reading more of your works!
    I see I was here....and that tells me I have been reading so much my mind is like a sieve........Compliments again!


  • Violet Lace
    October 18

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    I loved this poem. This is what poetry is about. It was a transformation in words. I feel like a butterfly! *lol ~Daina

  • I enjoyed reading this piece and especially loved the first stanza.
    Well done!
    Nela


  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 15
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    Imagery is alive here...A stunning piece with tremendous impact...Excellently penned! Bravo!


  • Vanessa Wolfe
    October 13
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    truly amazing poem here.


  • SezmeKnuHart
    October 13

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    This paints an astonishing visual picture.... well done. The wording is really beautiful.


  • savemysoul
    October 13

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    you did a very goood job, exceellent write

    ps. congradulations on being today's feature


  • Aalta silver member
    October 13

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    that is a stunning piece...
    a very thought provoking poem about life and soceity ... The situations and images used to carry the poem forward work more than anything....

    Congratulation on the feature... Thanks for sharing

    Aalta

  • Well Done

    This is a very insightful and interesting poem.
    Good job.


  • awannabepoet
    October 13

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    What a glorious piece of poetry, very much a worthy choice for today's feature.




  • Rend the Veil gold member
    October 13

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    what a powerful write!!
    your words moved that part of me that
    understood exactly what you were talking about
    thank you so much for writing such a stunning write!!!
    you are featured on TODAYS POEM!!!!

    with love and blessings

    Rend


  • brochoppie
    October 12

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    I love this one! Great choice of words. I really hope you win your poetry contest! Thanks for sharing with us.


  • raggyann
    October 12

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    this is a well written poem and the images were unbelivable
    i think your flow was realy good and i like this poem as a whole no parts better than another


  • sentient
    October 12
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    I get a true sense of burial and what life is here. Nicely put and very powerful. Thanks.


  • loSt in uR eYez
    October 12
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    You write very well with such emotion.


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    October 12

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    Ahhh...now here is a write that I felt deeply in my spirit. Understood and much appreciated!



    Az


  • Eveybodys-FOOL
    October 12

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    i like this u can feel the emotion in this poem i also love the imagery in this poem its like i could see you holding on to the grass for dear life.
    Great job and keep up ur great work.
    Stephanie<3

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