I can feel the ashen ghosts
surrounding you,
allowing for no release
of the anguish lying within
a heart scorned.
You seek redemption from a life
turning away from you,
and hiding itself,
and all the good it offers.
From the reflection in the mirror,
you see the tears staring back at you,
self worth has vanished,
along with dignity
for yourself.
Look to me, my dear friend,
listen to the voice of my heart,
as it sings to you
with the boundless affection I hold
for what you mean to me.
You have taught me how
to love myself, and others,
how to give without expectation,
or a need for it.
You have presented me
with the qualities of your own,
allowing me to become
the man I am today
yours...
Release the fear holding you back,
It is now shared by two,
step away from your present affliction,
it now belongs to us.
Together we shall go forth,
your burden has been lifted,
You are now me
and I you...
one...
A contest entry
- For Some Friends... by Heavenly Angel.
700 points, ended October 20, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this poem is soo beautifuul,very touching..........
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Thank you kindly
John
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Hold on today, with a friend. Release your affliction that binds you to pain. How often we help others from theirs, but in times...we often nelgect ourselves. Love the last line you are me and I you!
Great heartfelt poem.
~Sie
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Thank you very much
John
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This poem is so beautiful! Very well written! I especially loved the fifth stanza
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Thank you kindly
John
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The poem is asweet tribute to true friendship th einherent affectionand sacrifice and pain for the other, the compassion makes asimple poem inordinatly beautiful.The sentimnts are genuine and sincere.Thanks for sharing such rejuvenating honesty it reminded me of a few lonfg lost friends.Take care keep sharing...
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Thank you kindly
John
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You have define the terms "Companionship" anf "Friendship" very well.
It is nice to have a "rock" to rely on during trying times
Very well penned!
Congratulations on the shiny Silver
Very well deserve
Stay safe
David
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Breathtaking
The composition of the poem is extraordinarily beautiful, how you have conveyed the feeling and meaning of true companionship is inspiring indeed. I see the truth in which you write. It is amazing, keep up the excellent work, you are truly talented dear!
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Thank you for your kind words..I appreciate them
John
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it is always so much better to have someone to share things with. this was beautiful, john.
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Rally cry
A touching rally cry of companionship through all. This is a reminder that one need not face life alone. Although difficult to find, once found it is profound. The title is a strong statement.
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Thank you for stopping by and commenting
John
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A beautiful way of expressing love for someone and how the love shared by two is so much easier and so many burdens can be lifted and eased by doing so. Nice poem you have written here. Keep on writing for this is good stuff. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing this with us.
Steve
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Thank you kindly
John
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I feel as is if someone just said some "I do's" - very, very, very well done.
What a Loving, giving Spirit that is displayed.....
Love & Blessings,
~ ~ Janet ~ ~
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Thank you for stopping by and commenting..I appreciate it so much
John
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beautiful!
Your ability to convey such a loving and all encompassing truth is incredible to witness. As your words flow from your fingers and infinitely beyond, you have infused your own light with vitality and strength. Thank you for spreading this much needed message...
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Thank you..It was meant for you..I did not think you would pick up on it..I should have guessed you would..I use a lot of innocent deception in some of my writes, yet it is hard to fool family
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My Dearest Brother,
Thank you!!! You have NOOOOOOOOOOOOO idea what this piece did for me!!! You are amazing and with such perfect timing! It is no wonder I love you and cherish our friendship!!!
Great job on this one!!!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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This is beautiful!! It really is! When we see those that we love are hurting, the need to help them is so intense...I feel that here... We do have to remember though, that we cannot shoulder someone elses pain for them, we can only support them, they must learn to shoulder it themselves, or they can never truly love us, just depend on us...I want someone to love a whole me, not a broken me...to pick me up when I fall, but I must always remember that I have to be strong enough to shoulder my pain and burden on my own...Anyway...Absolutly Beautiful and touching! Makes me wanna hug you!
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Thank you for your generous comments..kind of you..so much
John
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Your sincerity reigns in these words dear friend. There is nothing that exhibits itself with more generosity than someone who makes it their task to uplift another who is down trodden. Two make the twine tighter and harder to break. You have combined your gentleness and heartfelt love to encourage. That is always a plus. LOVE is the greatest emotion we can spread about. You have done that with great finesse here. I wish you well in the contest and I know my friend is most appreciative!
Much Love Always ♥
Renee
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thank you for your kind words..I so appreciate them
John
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this is so beautiful. I can feel your emotions. I love the lines:
"Release the fear holding you back,
It is now shared by two,"
what a dear friend you are!!!
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Thank you I am speechless..so kind of you.i AM IN TEARS.SORRY
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im honored to have touched you with my comment...but hate that you are in tears. it was a noble act. good luck in the contest, but you already have won!!
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Your heart truly shows in every line of this piece
Very encouraging this is!
This would lift anyone's spirits!!!
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so kind you are..thank you
John
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you have penned this a message penned in life foe in the end John all we are not two but one.. love this message derived hugs always Angel♥
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Thank you.You are so nice. I am glad we hooked up..I appreciate your talent...and..I appreciate all your comments....Sincerely..Means a lot to me,..Thank you, from the bottom of my heart..This may sound weird, but .as a man,it means a lot to me.You are a nice person..What more can I say
John
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I really like this one. I especially love the ending. Very great write....so much emotions and it's just beautiful....so enjoyed reading it.
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Thank you kindly..so much
John
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