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a wisp of peace

the fragile peace is
a lingering mist
after the storm
of pain

writing to keep it together
sewing my pieces together
with the slash of a pen
the bleeding ink keeps
me in one piece
of fabric stretched
too thin across this frame
of who i am supposed
to be

a wind blows away
the tattered mist

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  • Kevin Moderators member
    October 13

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    bleedin -> bleeding?

    good intro, though perhaps add a verb somewhere in the first two lines, rather than having it be purely descriptive?

    excellent topic. Felt like you could have elaborated more!


    • justencase
      October 15
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      thanks for the advice

      i wrote this very quickly after class one day waiting for the mist and rain to stop and you're right; it needed some editing and some more thought

      thanks a bunch