Misty Morning
Dawns on closed eyes
the salt of tears
burns my cracked lips
puddles spread
drown new roots
eyes stare back
haunted, hollow, empty
when will the son
burn away sorrow
like the sun burns
rain clouds
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son == intentional? A bit of a strange place.
some interest images like puddles and roots. Roots drowning I didn't follow too well - in my experience it takes a lot of water to drown roots
salt of tears - watch out for the cliche! -
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thanks for comment
yeah, i was thinking son as in the Son of god/religion idea and this was inspired by a week of pouring rain and some of my plants died...so that's where the root idea came in
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