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october twelfth


the snow
buries my birthday
of yesterday
letting it suffocate
slowly


one last frozen bubble
pops, as i wake up to
green leaves choked
green grass pummeled and
sidewalks glistening with
building tops shining with
car roofs drooping with


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Author notes

blowstorm

in early october

i feel like.. a month ago i was complaining about how hot it was?

WHAT THE FUCK. i didn't even get fall.

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  • sixtimesseven
    October 12

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    yeah i definitely remember in september you were like OKAY SEPTEMBER GET COLD NOW. and now we're like UGH OCTOBER WHAT THE HELL?

    i like this lots.
    and you.
    and how:

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    looks like snowflakes.


  • internal heights
    October 12

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    I really like that parallel structure towards the end. It feels like the poems is somehow gusting or drifting, etc. towards the ending.

    Also happy late birthday. I don't have facebook anymore so I missed it, but I hope you had a good one and that you're enjoying the midwest : )


  • ilovebex
    October 12
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    i feel like fall is always a trick. you think it's happening and then randomly it's christmas.


    • acoustical
      October 12
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      autumn is a tricksy, sultry mistress...
      she comes and goes too quickly.