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Miracle Beneath My Heart

Encased, embraced, enlaced, in newness.
Enshrined, in time with fleeting feelings.
O new life, O blessing of trueness,
You eased the pain and hardship dealings.
O seed of love within me growing,
You have come to me, a life profound;
O tiny soul where love is flowing.
Where  dreams and wishes and hopes abound,
O little life through love created.
Our family future so appealing,
You’ve changed our lives and we’re elated.
I can’t describe this perfect feeling.
   We two through love have formed another;
   He’s your father and I’m your mother.

 

 

 

Author notes

Marshalline Sonnet:
The Marshalline Sonnet form is created by: AP poet; Mairi bheag.
This is a wonderful form that allows us to use feminine words for end line rhymes. Each line has 9 syllables per line.

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  • penman gold member
    November 24
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    Wonderful

    Wow, great use of sonnet form as always. Such terrific alliteration. Congratulations on the gold. it was so well deserved


  • PerVirtuous
    November 11

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    I've no idea what it feels like to have a womb, so I'll have to take your word for it. This is very nifty writing and I see why it won gold. Bravo.


  • Sonya-Erasmus silver member
    November 5

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    What a beautiful poem.
    A well deserved gold.
    Hugs
    Sonya


  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 24

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    A lovely sonnet..You are the expert at writing form poetry, dear niece...Such a nice topic...Beautiful flow and rhyme pattern...aunt


  • melphleg gold member
    October 19

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    Are you pregnant? If so, congrats. This certainly reads like it comes from an expectant mother. I feel they joy of a new life created by love.

  • vivuyo
    October 19

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    very simple but very delcate!!!!!

    a very nice one..


  • darl3n3
    October 18
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    A-m-a-z-i-n-g

    Wonderful.

    Reminds me of Psalms 139

  • tara wilson gold member
    October 18

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    i have had this one bookmarked and have enjoyed reading it many times. sorry, i was contest commenting and couldn't get to it until now. it's very beautiful and i think you're a wonderful 'formal poet'


  • Summer52
    October 18

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    Another WOW, my friend.

    Simply wonderful.
    Good luck.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 17

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    Aww.. this is just precious!! I shall never know the feeling myself, but I can certainly see how wonderful if must be! Beautiful write Sis.


  • Purrsanthema
    October 17
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    This is just lovely!


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    October 17

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    Awwwwwww
    This is so precious
    I see that you are working on the expecting thingy
    Ah yes, newborns are indeed a blessing
    and you show that love so well in this piece
    This form is new to me but looks like a fun sonnet
    The flow and rhyme is splendid
    Wish you the best in the contest
    Much love my friend

    David


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    October 17

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    i have no idea how to write this form.
    but i know what hits my heart and mind when i
    read Amera. if you are expecting a child
    my heart soar's with happiness for you,
    what a beautiful creation God has given you!
    a blessing , your words penned here make your
    news so profound, it tears me with joysss

    with love and blessings

    Rend


    • Amera gold member
      October 17
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      Thanks so much Rend but sadly the poem was for the contest. We're still wotking on the "expecting" thing


      • Rend the Veil gold member
        October 17
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        awww dang it!!!
        well in all of His perfect timing!!
        beautiful piece anyway!!


  • awannabepoet
    October 14

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    Oh Gosh, I love this Amera, Amera, Amera for President of the Universe!

    Your poetry is just awesome me lady, would I but bowe to thine knees for were I truly a poet then perhaps I could steal a glance into your poetic eyes.

    I love this form, it seems like a mixture of Alliteration and Sonnetry and lord knows what else, now you said 9 syllables per line?


  • second-born
    October 14

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    this is so heartfelt...two of my friends will have their 'small miracles' anytime now...and I bet these 'would-be' mothers will feel the elation you've penned...an excellent sonnet!!!!! God bless!!!


  • Hikari Lady
    October 13

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    This was a truely beautiful sonnet, one that has a wonderful thought, rhyme and emotions in it. I love how you described how babies come to life and it indeed sounds like a miracle through your words. Through love created soul. Wonderful as always.

    Love
    ~Noor


  • Cup-a-Joe
    October 13

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    This is really beautiful. The way you describe this thing called children-babies, showes your love for them.
    I love every word and it is bookmarked.
    Gold for sure.

    Joe


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    October 13

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    I'd say I tripped over it rather than created it. I was looking for a way of giving more choice to words at the end of each line of a common-or-garden English sonnet. Seeing someone else tackle the resulting "form" makes me realise that it really does give a very tight feel to a sonnet.

    There is something very basic, very domestic about this poem; the language throughout is quite high, until we arrive at the bathos of the last line, which is very matter-of-fact and colloquial. That really works!

    Bunnies for my Sis.


  • Lulu Gee silver member
    October 13

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    Oh WOW......you blow me away...
    We two through love have formed another;
    He’s your father and I’m your mother.

    Good Luck in the contest
    Love Lu x


  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 12

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    The only problem with this as I see it ... is, it ain't true... but hey at least the task in trying is most pleasurable.

    Such a grand poem, fittin for the form and subject.


  • Desire gold member
    October 12

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    Wow~

    Gosh You Inspire me to try this form~ what a Beauty rich in Imagery
    Can't help but want to read this again and smile wide
    You have a way with words that Mesmerize~
    Another Gorgeous verse Beautiful
    Keep that quill dancing

    Thank You for sharing Your Voice
    Best wishes in the contest
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • poetryality silver member
    October 12

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    I don't know if you have actually been with child but you surely exhibit the jubilation and feelings of total esteem a woman feels to carry a life within her womb. I love how you ended the poem, introducing the unborn to their God-given family. This sonnet is absolutely beautiful and tender. I love this! The best to you in the contest!


    Always with LOVE ♥

    Renee


  • Wandika gold member
    October 12

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    congratulations

    This is good news and a wonderful write.

    Jim


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    October 12

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    excellent~

    A beautiful sonnet you have penned here sis
    A pleasure to read as always
    I just posted a new one hope you come see me
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • Faeryn
    October 12

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    Aww! You'll be an excellent Mommy, Amera. Great poem!
    Love,
    Tay


  • Denerica
    October 12

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    Oh...this is breath taking, what a touching write for any mother to be...um could it be your news to break one day soon? You describe the excitement as truly your own. Beautiful. Excellent. Blessings.

  • Eusebius
    October 12

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    Oh, this is sooo beautiful! It reads like a prayer, soft, exceptionally, profoundly spiritual. I can't tell you how much I loved this poem...


  • AlexandraHamilton
    October 12

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    Sweet and beautiful. The form you used was smooth, rythmic, and perfect for the subject.

    Well said; best of luck in the contest!


  • StarEyes
    October 12

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    Sis,

    This is great!!! I love it... and there is no greater feeling is there? You did an amazing job on this one! Fantastic sis!!!!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 12

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    I had to rush to the contest to see what it was about before I began gushing my congratulations! lol Mairi is a genius and you are as well - I will never ever get over the fact that you make gorgeous poetry seem so effortless. Sigh. Oh, but how happy I am that you do... Love you xoxoxo


  • nordicsky silver member
    October 12

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    What a nice thought, a woman with two heartbeats and it is so apt that you should have used this form with its feminine line endings. I especially like the first line, which not only includes alliteration and internal rhyme, but also rolls off the tongue so sweetly. I wondered about the couplet...could you have used father and dropped the now or the indefinite article.

    Thanks for posting this,
    Love, Peter

  • Topnotchsy
    October 12

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    Stunning piece, and I hope one that proves prophetic.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 12

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    Beautifully done in Mairi's form
    Very tender, and keep trying, it is one of the most enjoyable manufacturing processes known

    Lovely poetry too

    Jeff


  • SteveS gold member
    October 12

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    Nice uplifting dedication. Rather good "wrap up" lines too. My favorite part is the first two lines...fun for reading aloud.


  • JinSays gold member
    October 12

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    Does this mean I should congratulate you?
    Here Im struggling to write a Senyru, and you just sit and out this comes.
    Beautiful.
    Happy, a good note to end my morning read on.
    And if this is a true story, indeed! Congratulations.
    love always,
    jin


    • Amera gold member
      October 12
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      hehe, thanks! Not yet but we're trying! Becks asked me to write this; I think she wants me pregnant too! LOL

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