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"Devour"

Sliding under the covers
Between her thighs I lay

She wakes to my kiss
My tongue searching
Seeking her hot release

Her heart flutters
As my tongue tastes
Swallows her sweetness

She opens to me
Giving all to me
As I feed upon her deeply

Lavishing and licking until
She is gone in the moment
Afloat in passions embrace

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  • BluRosePoet8488
    October 12

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    Hmmmm... I don't see a thing to change. Very lovingly written. Full of passion and sensuality. Keep the ink flowing! Love and hugs...
    ~Donna~


  • Warrior of Peace
    October 12

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    passionate

    This one is a good write it describe love making in such a deep way. When two people lose their way into each other.