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"Ardour"

He moves about her slowly, softly.
His quiet breath.
With deep whispers of his intent,
She trembles in anticipation.

Nothing but him, matters.
And as he moves about her,
Touching her with gentle fingers.
Nipples harden atop her glistening skin.

Breath coming shorter.
And she becomes wet,
In sweet anticipation.

He talks of his love.
His uncompromising devotion.
His honor, of her complete,
In whispers.

She knows his love is real,
As is hers.
Unto him she gives up her soul,
Heart, Mind and Body.
She trembles, In anticipation.

Her love blossoms,
Like a flower in full bloom.
Body quivering,

He kisses her then enters her
As they become one she moans,
In anticipation,

Where a man controls,
Her every breath and movement
She submits willingly.

Joining together in passion,
Where his soul meets hers,
She whimpers in anticipation.

Together they meet in bliss
With racing heart and breath,
Lips, hearts and bodies.

Love in all ways,
And the sweet anticipation.
Of the purest love.

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  • ckwriter69
    October 27

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    Sweet and very passionate. Anticipation is a key word in this write and is the ending word in every other stanza except the last, I would keep that consistency and make it the last word in the last stanza. Very sexy, thanks for sharing it.

  • xoFionaox
    October 15
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    repition of the word 'anticipation' in the first and second stanza maybe 'she tembles with desire' would be more fittingx