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[echoes]

Missing image

in the thunder
can you still hear my song
or am I lost

mute-silenced by the storm
an echo, nothing more

I pay no notice
as I wander the old road
through the wood
rimmed with birch and maple
bright with hues of red and gold 

lost in thought
my coat heavy with damp leaves
patchworked colors
wind driven-plasterd by rain
each leaf placed by unseen hands

my thoughts fly to you
so far away, and yet here
I feel you breath
softly curling down my neck
 I am no longer alone

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Comments

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  • drifting cloud silver member
    October 25
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    The reader feels the environment walking down the path. Nice comforting ending. - Bonita


  • amnouup
    October 23
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    Very beautiful

    Very beautifully written, love it

  • ea silver member
    October 19

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    wow, I would never even suspect that this was a tanka chain; reads very smoothly. Congrats!

  • Bruce silver member
    October 18

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    Where's the judge? I protest! We shouldn't have to compete against honest-to-God real poets!!!!!
    Annie, I think you've blown away the competition with this one!


  • Shantti
    October 17

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    Ms. Draige! I still envy your brilliance with tanka This is purely awesome and beautiful. I love it, thank you so much for entering


    • Draig aine gold member
      October 17
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      my humble thanks sweet sister

      you cast lightning bolts yourself lol


  • redmoonnrizing silver member
    October 13
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    Stunningly Brilliant!!!!

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