Voices. Whispering softly. Telling her things she didn't need to hear. Voices. Whispering how usless she is into her ear. Voices. Cold, harsh, barely audible sounds. Voices. The things making her tears fall to the ground.
Voices. Growing louder. Growing colder. Growing harsher.Covering her ears. The motion is useless. Voices. Whispering that no oneloves her. Tears beginning to make her eyes cloudier. Voices. The things making the small knicks on her wrist.
Voices. Growing louder. Growing meaner. Saying things even worse than before. Voices. Calling her a whore. Calling her her daddy's sex toy. Voices. Telling her to die and go to hell. Voices. Laughing as her tears mix with her blood and spill to the ground.
Voices. Shouting loud.She can hear nothing else.Her sanity slowly starts to melt. Voices. Saying that no one needs her. Making her take out her razor. Voices. The things that made her slit her wrist. Voices. The only reason her eyes no longer mist. Voices. The reason she's forever lifeless. Voices were the death of her.
Please critisize. It needs work.
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quite dark, i liked the repitition, just prove their annoyance, how you continue on describing everything about it. nice write on it.
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Thank you.
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I really like the intensity of this poem, as I read it I feel it should be read hurried and urgently, perhaps how it was written?????? Good one cant complain tbh, interesting structure and a good idea!!
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Probably was because how it's written. Sorry. Thank you very much, AGAIN!
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while reading this poem i just liked it more and more
AWESOME!!! poem -
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Thanks! Glad you liked it!
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Ha-Ha
Yeah, it is dark. Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. -
Wow this was dark. Voices.. this was just amazing. I enjoyed every single line. I wouldn't change anything about this piece. It was good. Anyways. Keep up the amazing work.
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