Rain was not part of the plan
When we began our journey
We were uneasy...unsure
I with my spikes, you with your wounded pride
We needed to talk
And the silence spoke volumes
We had barely crossed the green
The playground..the cafe..
legoland building dotted on the horizon
When the heavens opened
Sending crystal kisses
To awaken dying dreams
Searching now for shelter
Instead of words
Our pace quickened
Fingertips brushing now and then
Accidentally? perhaps
But my heart cried just the same
I felt the blueness of your eyes
Scan the contours of my body
Where clothing stuck and clung
I caught you gaze, tried to turn away
But for an instant I basked in the warmth
Even though my cheeks were ablaze
You smiled, a boyish half grin
As my hands sought to preserve dignity
Slipped your jacket around my shoulders
The scent of you stirred dredges of sanity
And suddenly words did not matter
For we both knew anyway
I tried desperately to claw back reality
But the heartbeat of the icy rivulets
Drowned out common sense
Would we? should we?
God yes...every fibre or my trembling self
Screamed silently..hold me..Oh God hold me
What..here? now?
Hell yes...here..right now
And Oh God..the solidity..the essence
After all the longing..all the denial
It was real..we were real
Raindrops could not come between us
Your lips upon mine,searching,seeking
The warmth of your hands delicious contrast
Beneath the soaking fabric of my blouse
You stirred..awakened .strained against my thigh
Sweet Jesus..this is crazy
We are both old enough to know better.
A promise unspoken was our vis a vis
A hot shower, your shirt, against my naked skin
A glass or two of something special
Music as always to unite two crazy souls
And then? wherever the moment takes us
Would we...should we?.... shall we?
Author notes
I dedicate this to those poet friends of mine....(they know who they are) who's foolish hearts have their own agendas..even though they are old enough to know better.....so..next time you get caught in the rain..smile and think of me...
hugs
T
Comments
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Nice Write
You excelled yourself with this one Theresa it's raining as I type to add credence to your lovely romantic poem so full of your usual unique imagery
enough to raise anybody's blood pressure said he (reaching for his tablets)
....Multi hugs....Best Wishes.....George
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wow
what can i say your words hit the heart the words i can never put down i always wanted to say to my ex i truely love this one truely i love this great job
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thanks....like i say...i love the rain...mmmmm
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Love in rain is a wonderful experience!
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love is a many splendered thing and then some times 10 to the power of infinity. with a big question mark at the end? oh yes, everytime
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Thanks sweets....glad ya liked this one....hehe i was in a lil naughty mood hehe
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beautiful darlin,ive been there before and those moments ill never forget,so much happiness can bring the most pain,you are amazing darlin
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I somehow missed this.
"Sweet surrender
on the quayside.
I remember
we used to run and hide.
No money in our jackets
and our jeans were torn,
My hands were cold,
but your lips were warm." M. Knopfler-The Waterline. I think that is correct anyway, been a while.
Sometimes we dream so longingly for that moment of unbridled passion to enter our lives, never realizing how many times we may have pushed it away. The sweet memories of youth, young love holding hands in the rain.
Erotic-perhaps not in the in your face style that many seem wont to, good-yes.
Peace
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thanks michael.....lol I have a lil thing for the rain.....hence the name change ...i think that the really erotic erotica is painful to read in a forum such as this....like a car crash kinda....we look through shielded eyes...
thanks sweets
T
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Erotica is always an easy read, my issue is how many seem not to know what a delicate line there is between erotica and pornography. I have several-perhaps I will post one up-will have to edit a little to avoid the XXX.
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lol post it quick......
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ill give you a nice standing ovation, I thought this was nice, didnt find it to be erotic though, I found it to be more artistic, like love in a special way. What the heck do I know, it still made me blush.
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Raindrops could not come between us
Speaks volume.
What a wonderful poem. It has been composed in an artistic way.
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Very good
Makes me wish I were there
Isn`t rain wonderful
The imagery is spot on, keep up the good work
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thanks..my poet friend comments muchly appreciated
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Now who on earth are you reffering to...lol!
Shucks girl, this is way too tender a tale to be labled erotic, arousing, sensual yep, but you are a poet my dear and you can be erotic in such a creative and poetically
charming way...it is truly a gift! and always a pleasure to read!
Enjoyed muchly
John
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hey big guy..glad this hit the spot...poetically or otherwise...who was i referring to?...lol...my lips are sealed
thanks for a great comment
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...Errr...what spot is that then...?
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lol...oh i see...u are a poet...so i will let u use ure imagination......T is soooo happyful today...im sending u hugs...btw do u have spotify...its awesome if u dont have it u need it...it rocks lol
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Great story poem.
This line made me giggle lol: Hell yes...here..right now
Love it!
Much love
~Donna
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Perfectly....
.... wonderful poem. I loved it line by line and word by word. You are such a talented writer I can see I am surely out of my league being on this site. I am always amazed by the beauty of your work. I will be stopping in soon to read another you can bet!
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hi there...thanks for such a lovely comment...means a lot from such a great poet as yourself
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If you'll allow me to be quite honest, most poetry bores the hell out of me. More often than not it appears to me to be little more than pretentious and self indulgent prattle (my own poetry especially). Adversely, this little gem here manages to dodge those aforementioned slights and actually left me smiling. As opposed to being forced to absorb something personal from someone's abstract thoughts and well crafted double talk, here we have a clear picture of a woman enjoying being a woman. How fun it is to witness such a journey when told in such a lovely manner. I think I'll read it again, log off the internet, crack open a beer and put on Rubber Soul by the Beatles. Thanks to your little poem here, I just happen to be in the mood for it now.
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My goodness...thanks ..Im flattered...seriously...Thankyou...and yay a beatles fan also...did ya check my page...I have some links there you might enjoy
Thanks again
T
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Ohhh my GOODNESS. This reminds me SO MUCH of my godmother. She's mid-divorce from a horrible man, and she has this guy friend, it's so obvious how much they love each other but she won't let anything happen coz she is scared or something. Sounds like this needs to happen for her.
Aside from that, the imagery and passion and emotion in every stanza was perfect!! Best lines, in my opinion, were
"Sending crystal kisses
To awaken dying dreams"
Absolutely beautiful, my friend!!!
-Kelly
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Have you got yourself a new lover? lol! Who ever this is they are some lucky dude, or maybe it's your current bo, whatever, you've sure as heaven and hell shown your feelings for the one in question here. Imagery here is awesome as is the emotions poring out of every line. I think for sure you need not worry as I'm sure that special one will be more than proud of this beautiful poem, a wonderful write and maybe even one of your best in a while. A little naughty, very sensuous and with erotic undertones. Hold your head up, be proud for you did very well writing this sweet poem.
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