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Progression


Ignorance
flows through iced veins
searching for any weakness
it may be able to exploit

Anger
spills like a lava bomb
from rancid tongues
without remorse for their aftermath

Seclusion
from reality
and all occupied within
only turns one's blood to stone

Defiance
of rules and trust
a never ending pattern of destruction
and self denial

Silence
the only sound
left to warm the heart
of those that possess contempt
and eternal loneliness.

Author notes

quote prompt:
"watch your thoughts; they become words.
watch your words; they become actions.
watch your actions; they become habits.
watch your habits; they become character.
watch your character; it becomes your destiny."

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  • Desire gold member
    October 16

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    Thank You!

    Thank You for Your entry: Progression
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit in its own way
    when I read this entry several times ~
    I'm Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest
    You took the prompt and brought forth much for my Mind to feast upon~
    Bravo!! When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard...
    This is what was shown to me~

    Woven Strengths: Wow~ Loved how You broke this down in segments~
    Very Unique also Intriguing indeed While I was reading~ kept seeing
    images of different corridors also rooms...where each was named according
    to what You had written for example- One room named: Ignorance also
    another named: Anger...like that It is like this feeling of People having
    to make a *choice* of where they want to go...Creative perspective~
    For some reason while reading~ kept being shown how words spit at
    another...turns the person to stone...I'm seeing spiteful-hurtful words
    thrown from mouth and the recipient turning to stone...Metaphor
    However that is to be Interpreted.
    You give the Reader much to think about
    Love the direction You took with this prompt
    Hopefully my comment to Your write makes sense

    These words grabbed and pulled~
    Anger
    spills like a lava bomb
    from rancid tongues
    without remorse for their aftermath
    Tugged at me to Listen...

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Voice
    also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Will be judged shortly~
    Many blessings too
    with much love and light~ Desire~*~


  • daviscth
    October 12

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    What an awesome prompt to write for nephew. I really enjoyed the way you did this and the imagery is just perfect. I liked the ending stanza most of all.


    • Errant Panther gold member
      October 12
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      thank you for the kind sentiments dear aunt I am glad you enjoyed this piece.