from words left unspoken
we carry on a conversation, still one sided,
(will you be here when I come back?)
and hold hands with phantoms of a lost memory,
(the last petal falls inside the glass jar)
aching for the promise of our imposable future,
(don't worry, I'll come back for you)
but under the disguise of pacified smiles,
(the stem is taped to a scrapbook)
we allow ourselves to hide in this illusion of a fairy tale,
not yet disturbed by the prince's kiss.
(the number you dialed is no longer available,
please check with your local operator
or hang up and try again)
beep:
"...saying sorry doesn't mean much, does it?
but for what it's worth, I'm s----"
Author notes
Prompt: start or finish your poem with: from words left unspoken
A contest entry
- ...from words left unspoken... by Ken-Maverick.
650 points, ended October 23, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best PW's only..HM or less (no gold,silver or bronze) by reveller.
400 points, ends December 18, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
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Comments
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Excellent
What a terrific write. and so very creative. Congrats on the honorable mention
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Stunning as always...Love how you capture the moment with "the last petal falls inside the glass jar" How you use special effects to bring the responses of the readers! Congratulations on your honorable mention!
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JUDGED!!
beep:
"...saying sorry doesn't mean much, does it?
but for what it's worth, I'm s----" <---what a way to end this fine piece.
Wonderfully done indeed.
Thanks for entering
and all the best to you in the contest.
Ken
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hahahahah! Now thats sheer brillance!!!!
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WOW. I can't believe I haven't read this yet; I've been missing out!
"we allow ourselves to hide in this illusion of a fairy tale,
not yet disturbed by the prince's kiss." and the part about the operator in the same stanza.... a-maze-ing.
this piece is incredible.
if this doesn't get a trophy, I'll take out every other entry like a bouncer and speak to the contest host
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What, no sappy? Awww!!!
Lovely piece, I enjoyed it ~
and the message within? So true...
(But, in all fairness, some apologies are very sincere!)
~ Tim
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These are one of those works that would profound Confusious to have said. A lot of power with prolonged subtlety. "We allow ourselves to hide in this illusion of a fairy tale, not yet disturbed by the prince's kiss." How gentle?
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