she pours drinks
to match her eyes –
brimming, drowning,
overflowing.
I’ve watched her curled up in her bed, foetal, beneath duvets on hot summer’s days. Sweating and crying and trying to scrape the hair off her damp forehead. I’ve watched everything she holds close to her bones seep through loose pores on her sticky skin.
I once wrapped my arms tightly around her in an attempt to hold her together
but after years of dreams and illusions caused by alcoholic unconsciousness
permanently shut eyes was so appealing to her eventually she became limp
and her struggles against my elbows ceased.
she once told me she was invisible.
I told her the world was so shit it was cliché to be invisible.
Author notes
Prompt 1;
"Drinking is an emotional thing. It joggles you out of the standardism of everyday life, out of everything being the same. It yanks you out of your body and your mind and throws you against the wall. I have the feeling that drinking is a form of suicide where you're allowed to return to life and begin all over the next day. It's like killing yourself, and then you're reborn. I guess I've lived about ten or fifteen thousand lives now." - Charles Bulowski
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A contest entry
- Quickie. by winterbound..
400 points, ended October 11, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Ahh...Charles Bukowski has been one of my favourites for a very long time. I enjoyed this piece, especially the first line. An interesting take on the prompt for sure...write some more soon!
Samuel.
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I loved every bit of this, miss. Am I dismissed if I should say your name too is quite beautiful;-)..
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I loved the first line of this piece, it's extremely original. The diction in this is also very strong and it's very story-like. The second bit of prose seems a bit like a run-on sentence, but other then that i really loved the entire piece.
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This is just amazing.
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"she once told me she was invisible.
I told her the world was so shit it was cliché to be invisible."
Oh my god, you have no idea how insanely good this is, especially those lines I've just copied and pasted.
Thanks for stealing gold from the rest of us
I love it.
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Oh god, I already know I'm screwed if you're entering. Bahh.
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lol you've got to be kidding!
i was just thinking the same thing about you!! -
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Psh, you completely kick my ass in all that is poetry.
But either way... I'm sure we'll come up with something worthwhile, now that the competition thing is a valid factor
[I hope so anyway, my writing has been shit lately] -
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agree to disagree!
i haven't written anything in almost a month, so i'm quite worried!
best of luck to you anyway (even though you don't need it) -
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agree to disagree then
But all of your writing is genius, despite whatever hiatuses you may be taking.
I look forward to seeing your entry, really.
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