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Lover's Hidden Place

Whispers of branches and
Leaves in the eaves...
A sweet, soft lullaby
To the lovers down below...

The wind, but a gentle touch...
Sweeps the Earth around
Into little things that wave.
Touching the skin of those
Two lovers amongst it's path.

The water, but a silent gurgle...
Rushing, almost silent
Over rocks and debris.
The soothing sound of it
Mumbling low with the whispers
Of the Leaves and Branches...
And the two lovers Above.

A fairtytale land, for both.
A hidden place, such a secret...
Two could hide forever...
And be found? Never!
A place for two to hold
Each other close...
A memory best not shared.


A magical place where
The leaves whisper out a lullaby...
The Wind rocks them asleep...
While the Water gurgles along...
A sweet, hidden, secret symphony.

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  • bleedingluva
    October 11

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    i love it very nice
    my fav part is

    "The wind, but a gentle touch...
    Sweeps the Earth around
    Into little things that wave.
    Touching the skin of those
    Two lovers amongst it's path"


  • Kira65
    October 11

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    I love it.... it has a great flow!
    my favorite stanza is

    "A magical place where
    The leaves whisper out a lullaby...
    The Wind rocks them asleep...
    While the Water gurgles along...
    A sweet, hidden, secret symphony."