There are times I feel so weary
When my days are dark and dreary
But I know, I need not worry
I’ll call Jesus in a hurry
You always come into my life
At most, when my world is in strife
You wash away my hurt and pain
Then shower me with kisses of rain
(Chorus)
And I cry tears of joy, my Lord
They are the raindrops of your love
You are the Most High, I adored
The True God in heaven above
When my dreams are slowly dying
I hold on to my faith; I stop crying
Then I pray my unspoken prayer
It gives me strength when I’m in despair
Oh, God, You’re like a rainbow in my heart
You color me with love from the start
With welcome tears, I‘ll sing Your name
My Lord, Jesus, I shall acclaim
(Chorus)
And I cry tears of joy, my Lord
They are the raindrops of your love
You are the Most High, I adored
The True God in heaven above
©Summer52, October 11, 2009
Author notes
Prompt: "Oh God ! Only you can understand the language of my tear drops...Unknown."
A contest entry
- my tear drops... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended October 24, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Yes, this deserved its honourable mention.Your faith shines so strongly in this.montey
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Thank you for your nice comment.
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Humm..the gratutudes and the love can be seen here in the sentiments you poured in the words..and this is indeed a journey of light behind the words..love it..well done...
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A late reply...
but from the bottom of my hurt...THANK YOU, again for this wonderful trophy.
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This is really beautiful and a fantastic statement of faith in a song. I think the only thing I'd change is line 4. there is one too many syllables; perhaps leaving the word "just" out would work. IMHO
Love,
Amera♥
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Thank you very much, my dear friend, Amera.
I am truly.
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It would be nice to hear the melody that you imagine here. Maybe in the future you could record and place that here too. Personally, I had some question about the wording of a few lines, but without hearing the actual song, I hesitate to critique since a song can bear more odd phrasings that just a written text. I like the piece as a whole, its a good spirit lifting write and has a nice strength to it. I like very much the last stanza lines: And I cry tears of joy, my Lord; they are the raindrops of your love. I totally agree with that ! Best of luck in the contest. Peace, Rhonda
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I would appreciate it very much if you could give some assessments (good or bad) on my work. Am not that fluent, that's why I like some constructive criticism, as well. I won't mind but would gladly accept whatever comment you can give, to make my work better.
Thank you very much for the visit and comment, Rhonda.
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