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I lay here quiet in the dark but hear next door the old dog bark
So peaceful here as cars go by, too fast I think and wonder why
Their tires crunch large gravel small to blow away each year by fall
I smile a bit at sound of thud as last car bumps hole full of mud
I hear young calves now bawling some all hoping soon their moms will come
A tough life surely theirs will be with just two years for them to see
Of course it is a hard life here so much more so for me this year
I always knew that I’d get old but never thought I’d be this cold
There’s always been hard work to do and felt real good each day when through
It got where I could not get done unless boys helped what I’d begun
I could not catch my breath some days but felt was just a passing phase
I never did believe the Doc felt soon I’d be sound as a rock
I hear way off a siren’s wail left wondering what was their tale
It seems to me bit louder now not knowing why I would allow
Some tires turn into my drive in sliding stop they did arrive
Bright blue and reddish Christmas lights reflecting in my room tonight
I lay in bed though cannot move, nowhere to go, nothing to prove
It seems to me I need not breathe for me there is no need to leave
Too weary now to even hear but see a light shaped like a sphere
While drifting off into a sleep I am not sad please do not weep
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Too Late…
Wandika 10-10-2009
Author notes
I am not as bad as the poem depicts. Just working on issues
Please tell me what you think
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One thing I hate about getting older is that I just don't seem to get as much done no matter how hard I try, and yet I always seem so very tired.
A wonderful poem. Loved it the first time I read it. It's worth many more readings. -
My best friend bill at 57 started feeling the cold last year. never bothered him before. Go talk to Myrataal in south africa about a bemer bed. It is german technology, magnetic fields I think. Helps the body take care of itself. She was pretty messed up and turned right around. Check it out, OKK?
Am in OKcity for 3 year old grandsonnnnnnnn's birthday. borrorwd lap top and I not gee and hawing. I left out my thermostadt and heat not working in truck. Had to wrap extra Tshirts around my legs. -
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Cold and nearly dead, think I'll go hunting.
Having Great Grandkids calling me Grampa tends to make me feel old.
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Well.
I learned while I had cancer to lay there in the dark and listen to the sounds. As we grow older we all think about life's end and how we would go about finalizing plans. I would hope for most it would be as simple as going to sleep. I have started to listen to sounds again.
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Hope all goes well for you
I know Anne in Texas (Theasp) is fighting cancer again too. I still don't know what I am fighting but sometimes I think it is winning. Hoping doctors will start treating me soon instead of practicing on me.
Jim
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A sad ending, this poem reminded me of my dad. He passed away at the hospital, but I'm sure he would have preferred to have stayed home and drifted off in his own bed. An enjoyable read.
Rory
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Sorry about your dad
Hope it goes well for me many years from now as is also my hope.
Jim
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Thank you for the note. You had me worried there. With me it seems, perhaps for all of us, that age came on much quicker than I thought it would, and much more covertly, somehow. In the second stanza "never thought I'd be this cold" : what a beautiful use of foreshadowing! Best luck in the contest!
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Just worn out not dead yet
Can't seem to get anything done anymore but working at it seems enough for me now.
Jim
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There is nothing i know worse, than to spend many empty hours alone in contemplation .It can have ways of bringing morbid thoughts to mind, that normally would just be quick passing sounds and thoughts, before ones mind is distracted by other things.
Age has ways of showing us just how fickle life can be.So much to do and so little time.Thats the way it seems.Youth lets one push mortality far from our thoughts.
As ever a great write, yet now seeming sadder than a short while ago
Good luck in the contest
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Thank you
I think we all spend more time on the small things the older we get.
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awwww this is beautifully sad! It tore at my heart strings! Very well done, the rhyme at the end just flwed effortlessly! Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!
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Thank you
Hope it had enough twist for your contest.
Jim
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