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About everything

 

She doesn't hear

as I grab onto belt loops
to keep him steady
while he slowly
slowly

bends down
with ninety year old bones,
balance and lips
to kiss his wife good-night
even though she said

“No, you might fall”
then I repeat into her ear

“He said that’s a chance
I'm willing to take”
and she cries
and he cries
and I cry, even later,

but not about

them.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • CaliOkie silver member
    November 9

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    Well deserved gold.

    Some chances we dare not pass up and gladly risk life and limb to hold intact a heart. It is good that angels stand by who understand that love is a choice we usually put above all others and that love outlives us all.

    This is so sweet and brought a tear to my eye. It reminds me of my parents. Yours is a superior talent.

    Garrison


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    November 8

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    Congrats on the gold.

    You have got me thinking with this one. Everything is fragile.


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    November 6

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    ok, so now i'm crying.
    90 y.o. and love go hand n hand,
    i only wish and yeah i pray too
    that if i am blessed to live to be
    90 i will still feel that much love for
    someone, to be willing to take that
    chance of falling for.
    i don't know how to put onto words
    how much your poetry always
    touches me in one way or another.

    loveandblessings2u & yours always
    love ya,
    joyce


  • Terry Collett
    November 5

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    This poem states an important thing. And that and the way you have put this poem together makes this one of my favourites.


  • Kiran silver member
    October 30

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    This is really amazing. Am so pleased yu won a gold trophy for this because thie was stunning. The wonderful sentiments expressed here are lovely and the poem gives a real sense of what true love is. I loved this


  • tjayrush gold member
    October 24

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    great

    This is why I'm here - to find interesting stuff like this. You won a contest with this? Not surprising. I'm not 100% sure of the title - I can't really connect it to anything. But its just a great poem. Thanks.


  • Harrisham Minhas
    October 22

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    Aw...it's sweet.
    Congrats on the Gold.



  • Nom de Plume
    October 18

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    something only a very few ever get to truly understand or experience...but just a pipe dream it seems for me.. congrats on your


  • Allyce May gold member
    October 18

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    HOLY CHEESY MACARONI. You are so goooood

    Poems like this always get to me, you know? Like when I see elderly people walking along holding hands - there is something so precious about that. Like that kiss. Like a risk for the one thing you can't go without.

    I can only sigh


  • thepoetssoul
    October 18

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    Love has no boundaries, and no limits to its power.
    You always amaze me with your beautiful heart and mind.
    Be blessed in all you ever do.

    Tony


  • Cup-a-Joe
    October 18

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    I saw the gold in this the first time I read it. The host did to I see.
    Congrads on the shiney.
    It's so well deserved.

    Joe


  • Namita
    October 18
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    moving.


  • Swan song gold member
    October 17
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    oh my!!!! This was stunning!

  • Swan song gold member
    October 17
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    oh my!!!! This was stunning!


  • Erik Ambrose gold member
    October 17

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    This is beautiful, even with the narrators lonliness at the end.


  • oldschoolhero
    October 16
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    lol!!
    this is awesome


  • Sweettears
    October 16
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    insightful!!!


  • Jersene gold member
    October 14

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    beautiful and endearing...growing old and sharing a love that strong is something we all hope for. I don't know how I missed this gem. Wonderful penning, Tara


  • paulcreates silver member
    October 14

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    Ahw yeah. That quote finished in your head then the last line blossoms in the mind of the reader. Beautifully done. You do this so well.

    Paul

  • The Devil18
    October 14
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    that is good full of meaning nice


  • e s h a.
    October 13
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    sigh..

  • testingthewater
    October 13

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    Very good the thought of getting old make this all the more depressing


  • Balldinger silver member
    October 12

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    strong, vintage and meaningful. brings hints of my g-folks - married 73 years now... your skill is well shorn here, TW. your light is bright and brings warmth.

  • Virgoan
    October 12

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    The feel of felicity can be found in this short poem. I wish life will be like this for most of us. The happiness in longevity, and love sitting beside us. Probably, happiness is a word not sufficient to fill the definition of this piece, this is more than that.

    Thanks for sharing your gift tara.


  • Everwind Rising
    October 12
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    I love this!

    • tara wilson gold member
      October 12
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      Brian! hi, thanks so much for stopping by, good to hear from you...


  • Levon
    October 12

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    lucky is the man who leaves the dance with the lass he brings, beautiful love story here Lady Tara, tender are the old ones, they know so much more about life and love than I ever will. excellent write here you have penned


  • Nicolette gold member
    October 12

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    this one touched me....beautiful

    ~ Nicolette


  • Cat gold member
    October 12

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    ultimately i think its what we all hope for.. someone who will risk
    for us-- someone who knows the importance of that bend and kiss no matter what..
    the very last line is my favorite--- i would pull that last word up with the others... but that's me.. like this very much

    m


  • charcoal
    October 12
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    a brilliant poem


  • just mercedes gold member
    October 12

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    This is lovely, perfect compassion and empathy, sad yet beautiful. Yes, it does hurt to witness love like this.


  • Bev Hilderman gold member
    October 11

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    Very nice Tara. I can see the look on her face as she said no you might fall. We are so  lucky to see the love that some get to share. And I'm glad you take the time to embrace it, for I know that you care as I do.

    Now what about the lady and the very nice flowers that are lasting so long.
    LOL
    I loved to here you both laughing like that. I miss working with you, and sharing the special times that come about with our residents.

    I wonder about all the tears we cry, I think that they are about even when it comes to being for joy or pain.

    I wish we had more for a good belly laughs, it's always so good to cry when you are laughing.

     

    Good luck in the contest.


  • decode
    October 11

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    unbelievably gorgeous.

  • Topnotchsy
    October 11

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    Beautiful. The shift from a passive role in the poem to active in the end offers powerful perspective. I'm struggling to find the words to offer a worthy comment, and I think that itself is the sign of a great piece


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    October 11

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    Simply, purely beautiful.
    The last lines are inspired.

  • LovingPhoenix
    October 11

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    Wow! A heart wrenching write! Beautiful!! I expected nothing less from you! A perfect write for the prompt! The flow, magnificant!


  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 11
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    Had to stop in for a re-read this morning. Yup, still touching.

  • Rowan gold member
    October 11
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    Simply beautiful tara. Brilliant.


  • chloris
    October 11

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    this is way sad and cute.


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 11

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    lump in the throat type poetry...you get me every time.

    xoxoxox
    L


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    October 11

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    This is just beautiful in it's simplicity ... and was a pleasure to read and read again.

    I hope that will be me when I'm that old

    Sue


  • Cup-a-Joe
    October 11
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    Just absolutely beautiful. Love has a power that pulls people.
    This scene is played out thru out the world as older people hang onto
    love.
    One of you best ones.
    And of course I love it.

    Joe


  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 11

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    It will come to you someday... you are too wonderful not to be loved like this as well.


  • cubert
    October 10

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    leaves me tongue-tied

    I don't know what the title started out as, but my first thought after reading this was that the title is perfect, really the crucial connection. For me anyway. I came around full-circle to it, and feel you've wriiten my own emotional response.

    This is completely inarticulate, but you're poem says you get me.


  • arafura gold member
    October 10

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    You always remind me that there IS beauty and love in this hard old world. Your words act as a softening agent on my heart and I am held captive by the spell. You have a beautiful mind and a special heart.


  • Nangaleema
    October 10

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    God.

    This is the kind of love most long for
    but rarely find.

    I think I may cry, too...

    Made for a beautiful poem, though. - Mary Jo


  • Peteskid gold member
    October 10

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    I used to fish at a pond near my house, little thing but with largemouth bass and trout...one day a white egret...snowy egret landed near me and stood still...people passed by, jogging, headphones on some... no one else noticed this magnificent two foot tall bird... so it takes someone who has an appreciation of beauty to notice it, in this busy preoccupied existence...many treasures, like this precious moment you describe, go unnoticed; and when we find them, we get to keep them...PK


  • penman gold member
    October 10

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    Wonderful

    A very touching and well expressed take on the prompt. You truly grabbed the heart with this one. Best of luck in the contest


  • Randomly Beautiful
    October 10
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    and bookmarked.


  • Randomly Beautiful
    October 10

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    You just know how to reach into the depths of a soul, and pull strings that let loose tears. Brilliant Tara, absolutely brilliant.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 10

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    Soft, tender and beautiful



    Jeff


  • Oisin silver member
    October 10

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    Is heartwarming to passe for this? How sad it is to grow old but how wonderful to do it with a love. Very pretty Tara


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    October 10

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    this is beautiful... I love the scene you created here and I love what I took away from it even more; we all can be deaf sometimes.

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