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Calling Sigmund Freud...

I have this reoccurring dream -
Bukowski is in my bathroom
sitting on the toilet.
His legs are skinny, pale as a dead fish,
and extraordinarily hairy,
and he’s naked, except for a Brooklyn Dodgers cap
perched on top of his head.

“What are you doing in my bathroom?”
I demand, although I see pages of my poetry
scattered across the tile - I open a window.

“I hope you fuck better than you write,”
the Big Bukowski growls,
using one of my poems to wipe his ass.

In dreams past I have killed him
by wringing his neck with my bare hands,
hitting him over his head
with a giant bottle of Boones Farm wine,
shooting him (there is never any blood)
and flushing him down the toilet.

Last night, however, the dream varied -

“I hope you fuck better than you write,”
but when he reached for a poem on the floor,
not to read, but to defile it,
I sat on the edge of the bathtub and cried
like a broken-hearted little kid.

Bukowski was suddenly dressed,
clean-shaven, and smelled like cologne -
“Your poetry makes me want to puke,
but you’re a good girl.  You’re a good girl.”

I still killed him, but I felt better about it.



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  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    November 28
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    I would have killed him for you rest assured. Although the thought of seeking Buk in the buff might make me want to kill myself instead to save the nightmares. Brilliantly done as always. No nightmares for me after this piece


  • PerVirtuous
    November 26
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    So, you kill those you admire? Then I will say I love your poetry and sleep like a baby.


  • Acqua Mossa
    October 27

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    so great.
    Im a huge fan of freud. im studying him now. i find his various rants about life hilarious.
    Anyway, have i commented on this? i cant remember, but i've read it several times.


  • Cannonsfire
    October 21

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    I think Buk was sitting in the house of someone who was gay, trying to be a man who in turn was not more than a mere child at heart...or perhaps I have inhaled too much Cali weed lol anyways it's good but then you always are C

  • The D O M
    October 20

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    That Bukowski, trying to put off the opposition! He certainly wrote some marvellous poetry but nev er touched your consistent brilliance.

    Superb poetry and story telling, I love it!!!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    October 19

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    I interpret the dream as meaning that; you desperately want to attain poetic prominence although perhaps you need to take a much different path, something less traveled, but with the gained wisdom of those before you who have ventured far.

    Powerful words Lane.


  • deercatcher
    October 18
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    Oh crap. I laughed out loud. Now I'll have to explain things here...


  • Jc91
    October 17

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    haha, loved the ending. This poem is very surreal, and I like it


  • Amera gold member
    October 16

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    No need th tell you how much I love reading stuff like this. Fantastic and work like this is what will make you live forever.

    Love,
    Amera


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    October 16

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    This was Buking great I'm sure old Heinrich will roll over in his grave


  • manatee
    October 15

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    A good hair of the dog poem, and the ending . . . unexpected. (In a good way, I mean.) -Manatee

  • Brilliant!!!! Unfortunately my lack of skills in an area you've proven to be exceptional in keep me from expressing just how brilliant I believe your poem to be.

    Keep it up! You're an inspiration.


  • Garmond gold member
    October 13

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    Well that is quite a dream and you have written it with such exacting sentiment and imagery that I feel as though I dreampt it myself.

    Bukowski is dead, long live the poet Dalaney.


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    October 12

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    wild applause goes here


    1) It is lean without feeling stingy.
    2) You etch a character swiftly - one that is already an established brand - and invest us in him.
    3) You etch a character swiftly and invisibly - a murderess, at that.
    4) You demonstrate the genius of strategic detail. Boones Farm, indeed.
    5) Quite incidentally, you write to my prejudices and I really like that.

    I would have been your willing alibi even though I kinda like the bitter old narcissist.


  • heaven all alone
    October 12

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    THIS IS AMAZING!!!! THIS IS SO AMAZING!!! AHH!!

    Sorry for screaming like an idiot, but I am seriously enamored by your sheer brilliance!

    Oh my lord. You are fantastic. Don't ever ever ever forget it.

  • Jade Jefferies
    October 12

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    If Bukowski had had half your talent ...



    Sheer brilliance, of course!


  • charcoal
    October 12

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    thank you for the reminder

    poetry can be fun (:


  • bigperm
    October 11

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    You know the old proverb

    dreams are the wishes your heart makes. Maybe you wish that Bukowski would read your work...even if he defiled it afterward. I don't know, I'm still trying to figure out this one recurring dream that I have that involves getting drunk with this little person that seems cool at first, but keeps looking younger and younger as we continue to drink. At some point they turn into an infant. There is also this talking dog that keeps showing up. Hmmm...Yeah the poem was great though .


    • Dalaney gold member
      October 11
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      lol...I think I'm going to write poetry just to read your comments afterward! I love them! Thank you for being here, my friend....Lane


  • nordicsky silver member
    October 11

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    The old git was just pissed off cos he had met a woman who was his equal... no better.
    I don’t think he was as tough as he made out and your salt tears would have certainly got to him.

    Thanks for the wonderful imagery...I will see this poem every time I sit down to enjoy Bukowski.

    Love, Peter



    • Dalaney gold member
      October 11
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      lol...i don't know if that is a good thing to see bukowski sitting on the john
      Thank you so much, Peter, for your lovely comment and your friendship. I am blessed to know you

      L

  • Rowan gold member
    October 11

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    oh, this is sooo good. Bastard. lol.


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    October 11

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    I think Big B would have approved your reaction.
    Clean shaven and smelling like cologne wasn't him anyway.

    I hope the bottle was a magnum of Apple (the original and still the best )
    and that he swirled like a gold fish all the way down.

    I hope you don't write on Charmin all that often Misslane.

    Serendipity here, we were reading some Bukowski when we saw this one.

    You are a good girl btw.

    *smile*

    D


  • Ellegirl silver member
    October 11

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    "Love is a Dog From Hell'' I'll bet he was mad because he had another encounter
    with a cockroach while sitting on the throne reading. One question- Did you
    make him replace the toilet tissue first?
    Loved it!


    • Dalaney gold member
      October 11
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      hi! Thank you so much for commenting, Elle, and no, the bastard never buys me tissue in the dreams...maybe I should let him live so he can go to the store?

      xoxo


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    October 11
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    1. You make sure you tell ME about your Batman dream.

    2. Matt is right. My therapist told me that one theory of dreams is that they are all about the dreamer. So the other people are aspects of ourselves. So the Bukowski of your dream is really your own self, your own doubts about your writing.

    Lane, you left the real Bukowski standing years ago.

    Let me quote to you from the current issue of Decanto magazine. I am quoting in fact from the interview with myself, as the current "centre stage poet":

    Decanto: Who are your favourite poets?

    Myself: Difficult to say. Anyone who can make me say "Wow!" I'm glad Carol Ann Duffy has been made Poet Laureate. I like Lane A Smith - you will never have heard of her! I love John Cooper Clarke too.

    Lane, the only regret I have is that I said "You will never have heard of her". That's something that will have to change.

    This poem is cool; and I am sure you fuck as well as you write.

    M.


  • MissingBatteries
    October 10

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    Hmmm, interesting that you Freud stars in your poetic nightmares; he usually just hangs out in mine during finals, although you might inspire some random appearances on his part.

    Ignore the voice in your head calling itself Freud; you are so brilliant you make my thoughts dance and want to be poetry. Thank you for sharing.

    • Dalaney gold member
      October 11
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      Thank you so very much. I always love seeing your comments.


  • tara wilson gold member
    October 10

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    lol...was this really your dream???? so weird.... but good poetry..


  • Solo Wisp gold member
    October 10

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    You mean Buk actually has a heart?

    Good girl ... yes, kill me again .. I wouldn't hand this to Freud .. he'd probably make more of it than is necessary, as seems the case in most of his advice ... but it could be fun to torture him.

    Pretty soon you'll have Buk in a cage and feeding him pieces of parched caviar with no acidic aftertaste ... ... ya know, so you don't have to kill him and he doesn't feel the need to attack your creativity.

    This does bring some images of what the discussion would be like between Freud and Buk though ...

    I like this poem for its after effect mostly, all your poems have that Lane charm though ..

    obviously I have some random ideas rolling in my head from this one.


    • Dalaney gold member
      October 10
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      I'd like to hear your ideas...lol Thank you so much for reading and for the applause


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    October 10

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    lol if i can play freud for a moment i'd say murdering bukowski means you are stressed about your inability to write what you feel is adequate in comparison..near the end he sounds like a father figure and i'd equate that to him being a strong influence in regards to your poetry... I have no analysis for the ending but then again I've never dreamed of killing anyone


  • Sesheta
    October 10

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    I love this last line.


    • Dalaney gold member
      October 11

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      you must be like me...the last line is always what I look forward to...I want that zinger of a feeling when I read a poem thank you so much for reading. L


  • John BoSox
    October 10

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    Strong emotion shown in this one..You held nothing back..It worked well..You nailed it..Superior imagination.seductive metaphore..Wow

    John

    • Dalaney gold member
      October 11
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      John, thank you very much for your applause and your thoughts. I value both


  • forty-one
    October 10

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    I really admire your style, my Princess! Especially loved how you repeated this line,

    "I hope you fuck better than you write"...

    that was so effective! You could almost feel the intensity of it... like digging in your nails; and for a minute there... I thought you were going to go somewhere else with this. I'm sure we all know what that means, but you shined brighter as only you could do... which made this a truly impressive read.


    Troy


  • LivingxXxProof
    October 10
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    I loved this. It made me smile.

    • Dalaney gold member
      October 11
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      and your comment has made me smile. Thank you so much.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 10

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    If I ever get to write anything a quarter as well as you do I shall die happy

    Whatever your dream Bukowski may think

    This poem, rather proves he was not a great critic

    Superb stuff

    Jeff

  • Just a poet gold member
    October 10

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    well if dreams have evidential value this proves one of two things
    Either Bukowski, although he could write, had absolutely no taste
    Or BLOODY HELL you must be one hell of a F***




  • piggyback
    October 10

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    Nice... interesting too. Love the references and how realistically dream-like it sounds. Makes me wonder if you actually had this dream. It's very poetic, though it sounds rather like a nightmare. But your poems are definitely very good!


    • Dalaney gold member
      October 11
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      Thank you I've actually had this dream several times...I always wake up frustrated because what I really want to do is have him sign a book for me


  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    October 10

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    I felt like watching a movie...the scenes are so alive


    • Dalaney gold member
      October 11
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      thank you so much. I hope you are well and I will be by soon.


  • arafura gold member
    October 10

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    Sigmund would have had a field day with that one Lane! You're amazing my friend!


  • Emerald Dog
    October 10

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    Had Freud read this, he too would have killed the little shit. Had Bukowski read this he may well have wiped his arse on it - in an attempt to crap on the competition. Intriguing concept, spectacularly delivered in a riot of images and riotous imagination. Indeed you are a good girl.


    • Dalaney gold member
      October 11
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      Why thank you, sir I appreciate your reading my poetry so much. I went to your page but you haven't posted in a while..c'mon, let's get moving!


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 10

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    LMAO

    WOW! DAMN.. you never disappoint me my sweet Dalaney.. l.o.l. damn good ish lady!

    • Dalaney gold member
      October 11
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      lol...I think I heard that laugh all the way over here in Georgia! xoxox


  • Jersene gold member
    October 10

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    well, I'll leave the psychological analysis to Sigmund...as for the poem, I love how effortless you make poetry look. You just know how to take a snippet of your life and wow the reader. Excellent penning. Enjoyed

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