Sun is shining, yet,
lugubrious clouds block the healing rays
from my neglected heart.
My mind's eye takes a stroll
down a melancholy trail.
Dry colored leaves of memories,
swirl with each step.
What could've been...should've been...
what was...
My hand aches,
for warmth to enclose and guide along the path.
Crackling sounds of life,
whisper distantly.
Meandering along this solo passage,
I am comforted.
Embraced by the scents of Autumn,
a stream of light, gently breaks through,
kisses my cheek.
Finding warmth in my pockets,
I smile,
walking on...
Author notes
Loneliness, coping, keep moving, watch for the break in the clouds!
In a list
A contest entry
- HOW WOULD YOU COPE WITH LONELINESS????? by Talking Toni.
700 points, ended November 8, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is beautiful in a sad, wistful tone. Such a fitting feeling for Autumn- lonely. I love the way you end this though, "finding warmth in my pockets"
This is lovely!
Kris
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Loved this... Poetic and a short story in its own right... Love the image of the light breaking through and kissing the cheek, giving just enough rejuvenation, comfort and strength to find more peace and independence within self (as seen with the action of placing cold, aching hands in one's pockets) and a "smile" as the journey continues... I love how you didn't "overwrite" this one bit by going too much into the feelings/sights of autumn, feelings of lonliness, etc... Great Job!!! Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest!!!
Peace,
Russell
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"Dry colored leaves of memories,
swirl with each step."
i really like these lines - i love how you used this as a metaphor for the past's crisp & sad memories. well written.
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Beautiful Imagery!!!!
I love this!!!! It is inspiring and brings a renewed apprecaition for nature/seasons...And Fall brings with it the crisp air bright blues skies, a time to reflect before the dreary days of winter set in. And Although I love the snow and ice, there is such a beauty about Fall...I guess every season has it's own mark of beauty...and seeing the beauty somehow deflects away from the loneliness!!! Thanks for such an uplifting poem and the best of luck in my contest!!!!~~~Toni~~~
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wow a splenderous poem loved its softness and warmth very nice indeed xo
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GOODNESS
What a beauty of a write! and that word ' lugubrious' ..exceptional.. somehow i don't think i've ever recalled hearing it before in a poem..very cool word..regardless of the sad meaning..this is going in my list sweetie!
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Wonderful
What a terrific write. So very creative and well done. Best of luck in the contest
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