I bring the silver colored spoon to my mouth.
Slowly, a puddle of good
comes toward me.
I see the red brilliance of pepper
cut long,
the green of peas, added just for that purpose,
cauliflower white,
almost-octagonal carrot
coming to my mouth
to make me whole and healed.
I smell the elaboration
of bone and breast,
spice and lime.
Ripples dance with oily bubbles
as I blow in anticipation, and yet,
I burn my tongue.
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I did enjoy this it was a yummy read and nicely written best to you in our contest have a great weekend be well
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yummy - made me hungry for a hot bowl of soup, especially with all the snow outside right now!
had to laugh at the ending - done that myself, many times....
Great imagery. I enjoyed this
thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
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I really enjoyed your soup!
All the way to the end....when I burned my tongue! lol...
This is well penned and was a very enjoyable read! Thanks so much for entering and sharing your talent! Hope to see you again and again...Best wishes in the contest and always!
Write on and on and on...
and
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An unusual topic to get poetic about, however, you handled it well. I might alter the green pea line and smooth it out. Here's a suggested thought; "sweet young peas, added for that touch of green."
Good luck in the contest and happy trails.
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I really like this.
"I blow in anticipation, and yet,
I burn my tongue."
writes that speak/describe the ordinary and real stuff of life...yet have depth...always get me. Well done!
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Superb
'tis a very fine write, indeed. You have expressed your thoughts quite well with excellent imagery. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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This is cheeky and sweet, something we think to be good wholesome and safe turns out to be unexpected in its result, very creative i lke twists =]
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well done, any left for me?
yummy, i can almost taste these fresh flavours and textures in my mouth before my imagination recoils after i also scold my tongue
pepper makes it more spicy yum
peas are little balls of goodness
cauliflower with its beautiful texture
carrot with its crisp taste
meat added is delish
however spice and lime
are two ingredients
that have rarely if not
ever entered my own soups
after reading this
they surely will
thankyou for your poetry piece
that enhanced my perspective of flavours
while tickling my tastebuds
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wow....but so unfortunate...
yu made my tongue swell!
But the last line can also be something like a prophesy infact...! What yu feel beautiful could not be beautiful all the time!
Hey im intrested to know what did yu do the moment after yu burnt yur tongue...yu shouted or scurried or ran for water or... -
Really loved this ... .
I could almost taste the warmth and goodness ... .
Love James ... . -
MMM^^
I
Love
Soup!
delicious piece, excellently written<3
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Looks like you are attempting to clean up your unhealthy life style, as all of us are.As much as you try to do it by the book. there are still pitfalls to be encountered..You question if all the sacrifice is worth the effort..This is the byline for all of us in this regard.You have utilized a great deal of wit in this poem..You have a wonderful sense of humor..It shows..good work, poet..I enjoyed this write
John
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