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she knows

as sure as she recognizes the brown center
of a black-eyed susan

or the pull and pill of blue knit

first he will blame himself
and
later her


i say

things are not as they seem

stone fields
never empty

the river never rises

and in maggie's version


the canary
died of natural causes











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  • Elora Danon gold member
    October 26

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    I have to add my voice to the many accolades you have received. Your work never fails to impress. I love this one Mary.

    Thank you for being here.

    e~

  • Virgoan
    October 16

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    loved the impact of this part:

    'stone fields
    never empty'

    and the ending is brilliant.

    thanks Ms. Mary for sharing your gift.


    HENSLEY


    • Cat
      October 17
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      just discovered this lovely comment.. thank you


  • e s h a.
    October 13

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    you can touch the sound of the reader's breath with the stories in your poetry.


  • just mercedes gold member
    October 12

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    multi-facets everywhere! this is a good poem; especially liked the link back from the last stanza to the title, wraps it up nicely.


  • Nicolette gold member
    October 12

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    brilliant poetry

    ~ Nicolette

  • Rowan gold member
    October 11
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    Good. I loved the ending, mary.


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    October 11

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    wow... what an incredibly good poem

    brilliant work


    al


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    October 10

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    we only acknowledge and comprehend the entirety of what our previous experiences allow us to..everyone views everything differently because no two people have lived the same history. at the same time sometimes our minds like to warp these situations so that they work out in our favor lol. that has always fascinated me, you articulated it beautifully.


  • tara wilson gold member
    October 10

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    everybody sees things the way they want to look at it sometimes...i really like this one Mary..


  • moonkissedtiger
    October 10

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    You took something that happens to most everyone and spun it so unique & beautiful.


  • Cannonsfire
    October 10

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    Isn't it ironic that everyone's idea of what actually happened is different? And isn't it wonderful that we are not all the same, for conversation would be moot to say the least. lol....I think the canary probably died of boredom, little cages do that you know C


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 10

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    It's funny (as in "ironic") have some seem to have such selective memories. I went through a period like that, where my every thought was questioned, since THEY didn't remember it that way. I always wondered where they were at the time. Brilliant, of course, Scribe. Good luck in Elora Danon's contest, Sweetie.



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