Light dissolves through the morning clouds
Displacing the enveloping darkness.
A blanket of arid fog seeps through the cracks
Skin so cold, so damp, so relentless.
For here lies a world shattered
People suffer their own selfish guise
Poverty and disease eat away the humanity
Rains fall in torrents from acidic skies
No hope there is left for what will be
Faith has long since deserted me
For I see myself and what I've become
Under the shroud of empathy
We gave our hearts to those in need
Our flesh, our blood, our bones
Yet there they stand decaying before our eyes
Devoid, devoured inside their demonic tones
No angel of mercy resides here
No bastion of light for all to see
Lost we are, forgotten, consumed
By all that we could not be.
In this wasteland I dwell terrified
Of all that could be and could not
I've no passion left to carry me forward
Happiness but a misguided thought
The days have passed whence long I came
Nights too have faded into memory
No longer will I try to change such a world
Consumed by its own blasphemy.
This world is but a shadow of itself
Drifting desolate in the heavens of fear
Decaying, dying, destroyed it is
By a cancer whose face is all too near
And in this burdened corner of paradise
Dwells a humanity which has no resolve
It's morals are lost, it's lessons spurned
No society left to devolve.
Comments
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This poem has some lovely vocabulary in it but I would say that the voice has a tendency to lean towards being a bit preachy. The message is apparent and there is enough emotion to lend a certain level of power to the piece but very little real imagery. I find it extremely difficult to counterbalance all the tools of poetry properly but the bare bones are present here - I just think that a bit of tweaking could make all the difference!
The last line is profound. I think that it's the real thought provoking kick in the teeth that I was looking for throughout the body of the poem.
Very nicely done. Thank you for your entry & good luck in the contest!
- Bean Sidhe

