When deep silence casts its spell,
my mind has so much to tell.
During night's lonely hours that play begins,
hopes and fears reign while the full moon grins.
Why are my mistakes the only thing I see?
Why is the emptiness most known to me?
No one knows how I truly feel,
the mask you see will never be real.
I can smile the most when I feel bad,
when everything in me is completely dead.
Truth doesn't live in these happy eyes,
dig deeper and you'll find nothing but lies.
Maybe that's keeping me from breaking free,
that fear of the truth that's hidden in me.
I feel like my victories have been erased,
like I have been so terribly misplaced.
Author notes
This is how I've been feeling these day, for no particular reason. Good or bad? You decide!
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Why are my mistakes the only thing I see?
Why is the emptiness most known to me?
questions so many ask..yet they never seem answered..
Truth doesn't live in these happy eyes,
dig deeper and you'll find nothing but lies...
this hit me really hard cuz at times it feels that thats all life is is lie
and my descion is neither good nor bad but instead wonderful -
"the mass of men lead lives of quiet desperation"--Winston Churchill
"I am the way, the truth, and the light"--Jesus The Christ
how can light live where there is no truth? I feel this way sometimes ,but releif comes. -
Hmm, in these words of reflection I see
One who feels as bad as me
But you my dear are so much more than I
We go to different places when we die
The reverence and attitude show you to be
A lovely person whose spirit and soul are free
So take the darkness and cloak yourself within
Control the darkness and you will always win
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Reflective dark write...We all have times when we are quiet that the silence can be a torment...other times a relief...Thank you for your write!
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Thank you for your comment.
Nela
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Isn't it hard to take when you're going along just fine and then, somehow, you get side-swiped by your own thoughts? Funny how one little event can send us down those side roads of our mind. I know I've felt this way; probably we all have. You write so well! "That fear of the truth that's hidden in me" that you mention seems so real when one is in its grip. Then later it seems more like a fear that what's hidden in us IS the truth, when most of the time we know it's not. Thank you for showing me that doubt reaches all of us at times. And thank you for sharing!
P.S. Don't believe everything you think!
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Thank you for reading and for your encouraging words. I wanted to make that line open for different interpretations, both the fear and the truth we're hidden in me at the time.
Nela
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i loved this, great job. i've felt like this before, where you feel like no one really knows you. and sometimes i feel like no one cares enough to get to know me, you put these emotions into your poem and did an excellent job.
keep writing
ps. thanks for the commentss.
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Thank you for stopping by and commenting.
Nela
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wow know this feeling well,
and it had me bound for many months
I finally feel the fresh air on my face
really well written
Love & Blessings
Rend
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Thank you so much for your comment.
Nela
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Yes, it happens
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Thank you for reading!
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Very good!! You can really feel this
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Thank you so much!
Nela
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Nicely done! I enjoyed the rhyme & message within.
~ Tim
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Thank you!
Nela
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lovely... really shows exactly how you are feeling. I love the lines
Why are my mistakes the only thing I see?
Why is the emptiness most known to me?
The fifth stanza seems to interrupt the flow though...
overall great job
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Thank you for reading. I'll fox that stanza a bit.
Nela
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Fith stanza rhyme is the only issue I can see that might need a little stroking in order to maintain the quality that I've learned to expect from you, otherwise this is another example of the fine writes that you are capable of producing. I like the title, "mind games", self doubt that we create within ourselves. Great job Nela, and have fun at school.
Smiles
Rick
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Thank you, Rick, for advising me, I did change it a bit and hope it'll sound better now. I'm glad you liked the poem.
Nela
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These are the perfect words for how im
feeling right now. Thank you and Great job, honestly.
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Thank you for stopping by.
Nela
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Only beautiful minds can think of mistakes committed by them.Your thoughts are very right ingredients for cooking delicious poetry.Keep it up.
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Thank you for this interesting comment.
Nela
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Ahh , beautifully written sad & heart
touching , very evocative Nela !
Thank you for sharing this poem today ..
Best always & hugs And have a great
time on your vacation !! Easy
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Thanks for reading Easy, I'm glad you liked it. I wish I was going on a vacation, but in fact my vacation is over, my classes start on Monday.
Nela
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Nela--I am sorry to hear your feelings but happy that you've put them down on paper so clearly. That can only help to look the truth straight in the eyes---then you can move on.
Here is a very big
for you. You truly are a jewel and I know you will recognize this in yourself and find someone who sparkles on the inside as bright as you! I am sure of this!
Safe journey! Will miss your absence but look forward to hearing more later!
Marlene
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Thank you dear Marlene for these lovely words.
I hope I won't miss out on much round here.
Nela
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wow
thats confessional poetry at its best.Loved it. You also leave ahint of treacherous events you have been through..which i know pretty well.ADieu hun for BG......will have ya onL from there! -
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Thanks for reading!
Nela
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