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Poorly Cloud

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Once a cloud suffered from Flue
He puffed and coughed all day long
He was floating in blue with unease
It was utterly cold; sun was on a vacation.

Puff of cold breeze with a little whiff of dust
Passed by the cloud that he inhaled to appease
The whiff whizzed through his nostrils
And ruffled the dormant hailstones.

The panic made the Sneeze to wake up too
The Sneeze broke out loose inside the nose
and pushed out the hailstones with mighty force 
Perplexed hailstones gushed out in abundance.

They all tossed up in air acrobatically
Their heads banged against each other; tin-tang
The rubbing of heads kindled the lighting 
The thunder struck and they all tumbled down.

It was whimsical view through my patio door
The whole lawn was covered with white balls
I picked one up and brought indoors
Mum, mum, “look, what I’ve got in my palm.”

I opened the palm to reveal the secret
but the hailstone had been turned into water
I cupped the water and poured out into a bowl
Ever since, it lived in my fridge as an ice cube.

 

 

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  • mina nagi gold member
    October 18
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    Thank you very much for you encouraging words... I'm chuffed...
    Good luck with judging.

    mina

  • This piece you have here had some awsome imaganary flowing in it. It was very amusing too read, I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest


  • Jbloc Armada.
    October 12

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    I actually thought this to be quite cute. almost like something you'd find in a book of childrens poetry. great write very creative.


  • Amera gold member
    October 12
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    Beautiful thoughts and imagery.

    Love,
    Amera♥

  • Aries gold member
    October 11
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    This is such a delight to read it is great leave a poem with a smile on a face
    Beautiful imaginative write well penned


  • Stickboy gold member
    October 10

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    loved this, it was a cute refreshing thing to read today, cant wait to read it to my daughter later today , I know she will love it too. thanks for sharing this
    Sean


  • Young Spook
    October 10

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    lol, that's excellent, ever since it lived in my fridge as an ice cube!
    I like the pure whimsy of this poem. It calls to the whimsy in my blood, as I am a purely whimsical creature


  • Mari Goes gold member
    October 10

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    Ah, this is so nice! A perfect children poem, which I imagine you have read to Deeya
    I enjoyed it


  • smitaanand
    October 10

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    Lovely imagery and imagination run rampant to collect elusive beads of humor that heals and mesmerises the mind tired of cynical indulgences in gulps of seriousness as befits an adult.Thanks for sharing lovely thought and fantasy come alive in descriptive words that draw out smile from stoic dispositions feigning maturity waking up the somewhat disillusioned child that breathes dep wihin .Thanks for this treat it is lovely...

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