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"If you cannot be a poet, be the poem."
David Carradine
i.
I saw him standing near
a newly born river.
He is the survivor of the aftermath,
and the river its child.
ii.
He is cornered
by devastation
while holding tears
in his waterhole eyes.
iii.
The water is now the half-laden
skin of the cemetery --
a sanctified land
for the soul-less bodies,
of our loved ones,
of his loved one.
iv.
He is carrying
a sack not of rice
but of bones
of his wife.
He is carrying
a sack not of ordinary love
but of till death do us part.
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Author notes
I saw this man in television. He is not a poet but at that moment, he is a poem.
In a list
- tatak PiNoY group list • next in list
A contest entry
- Quote Inspired. by Naridill.
400 points, ended October 15, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Contest: For Those On My Favorites List by Night Hope.
1200 points, ended November 6, 52 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wondrous work!
Congratulations on the well deserved Gold.
Love
Myra
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I love this. I can see why Heather gave it gold. Good job.
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Oh god, this brought tears to my eyes and sent shivers up my spine! The last line hit home with a tangible punch and I lost my breath in its wake... wonderfully sad and moving.
Amazing piece penned on such a sorrowful topic and well-deserving of the gold.
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"cornered
by devastation
while holding tears
in his waterhole eyes."
love your word choice here; and the ending is terrific.
had to stop by cause I saw this in a contest and the title attracted me 
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Ahhh, I remember this one and meant to comment on it when we were in the previous contest together. I'm glad you brought it back to my attention, Hensley. This is a great response to the given prompt. I remember watching David Carradine in a lot of movies and television shows over the years. I think he would be most pleased with you for this one, Grasshopper. Thank you for entering it in my contest. Good luck, Poet. 
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GAYA NG DATI
Great!!!
you're like a river, always flowing with the inspirations life is giving us. ^_^
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Hey, I read that quote of the day and I was like WHATEVER, as iffff I am going to be a poem, lol. Now it all makes sense.
Jesus fuck, everytime I read that ending I get goosebumps, and I have read it many times. I'm speechless. This is a masterpiece - I have to bookmark it.
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Thanks for the comment Allyce. I really like this piece. I felt his dedication to life and his love.
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you wrote a wonderful poem dedicating to this awesome quote. loved how you draped it with beautiful words. well done. and congratulations on a gold cup.
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You create life. I know I have told you this and you are unique, that is why or how anonymous a piece is, I can see you through it. This piece is no exception, your voice is vivid.
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Thanks Heather for recognizing this piece in your contest as well as the quote that inspired me.
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oh, i'm crying right now Hensley, this is so powerful...excellent poetry...
""If you cannot be a poet, be the poem."
David Carradine"
i love this quote... and i love this poem, very emotive.
[in the title, is should be 'are', also, "but of bones
of her wife - should be 'his' wife]]
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Thanks for the corrections Tara. I am glad you liked the poem. I think this poem hit me on a personal note.
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parang ako mismo ang nakakita nito
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Another good one Hensley..
I especially loved the last two parts - I'm such a sucker for striking endings.
This piece is so sad it's leaving me speechless. And a what a creative take on the prompt..
A knockout of a piece.
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The man in the video by the way was a survivor of the flood in Zambales. Che che Lazaro is doing the interview and I am speechless with what he has done considering that the effect of the typhoon is really depressing.
I must say, love is love.
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