It was that night
when I looked up at her eyes and realized how boundless they where
emptied by her body's unrelenting use
I immersed myself deep with her soul
All I could see was my reflection
as long as I can exist within those bottomless depths
I can ask for nothing more
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i liked this. i liked the length -- thought it fit perfectly. good job . thanks for entering and good luck
-- jordan. -
I love how love can truly make two people become one. The line that did it for me with this poem was "I can ask for nothing more". I did not know what direction this was going, but when I read that line it perfectly summed it up.
The reflection part was a great touch. I think when two people are in love with each other, the level of the love matches one another. It sounds as if you have found a significant other that you really do love, and they do the same for you!
Good stuff!
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