Shooting star
or
satellite
to my rose tinted eyes
they're all stars.
all wishes i'm making
hoping that one will fall into the palm
of my hand
and i can save the star dust for a rainy day.
as the world flashes by the car window
i wonder...
if you too are staring at time
slipping away too quickly.
the hour glass is tipped
sand falling
slowly maybe...
we have time to grow
to understand
to love
the smell of wet leaves brings me
to
and
away
from
you
every
day.
hopefully the snow won't cover up
all the colours i'm seeing
and that woodsmoke and evergreen will keep us together
longer than i ever thought possible at 15.
I think i'm finally doing this right
we're on our way
with you driving
and me
happily staring at you
from the
passenger seat.
Author notes
Prompt: The passenger seat
lyrics are here:
Kat almost kinda sorta has a boyfriend >.< can you tell?
lol
A contest entry
- Tiny vessels oozed into your neck and formed the bruises. by e m i l y.
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Any ways i could have possibly make this any better?
Comments
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Aww, this is so cute. I am so glad that your "sorta" happy in love hehe. Congrats on the HM!
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You know, I can't really choose a favorite stanza because it's all together, you know? It all ties together in a way without the rest each can't really stand alone. It's kind of beautiful.
My favorite line/sentence though would have to be 'happily staring at you from the passenger seat' because it really ties back into the song.
I loved how you used the lyrics, but I wouldn't have expected any less.
Good job!
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thanks Em
i really like the end too
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Why, you're welcome.
I've been wanting to hold this for awhile now. It's been sitting in my drafts actually.
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