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Strength to Breathe


I'm not sure I know her
the girl who loved you
who gave her every breath for you

golden necklaces melt in my palm
and memories flicker in my mind
love is not always found
where we look to the most

your rose petals stain
my keep sake box
where the past is kept
under lock and key

despite our tragedy
I woke up this morning
and smiled at the rain drops
fogging my glasses

despite my tears now
and the growth Papa brings
I realize this to shall pass
and say a wonderful Amen

today I remembered me
who I was born to be
how wonderful my life is
because he gave me strength to breathe


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  • marandah gold member
    October 13

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    Another beautiful write

    I love these chronicles of Strength Shows a real 'attitude of gratitude'

    I loved the two verses which began 'despite'. Brilliantly pieced together.

    And I also love how only the words which relate to Him are capitalized.

    Well done.


  • awannabepoet
    October 13

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    Excellent poem, you know it shows your humanity very well this piece of peotry.

    I know you have more of this to say there is so much kept under lock and key some might well bubble to the surface yet as you have said All Things will come to pass one way or another.

    Thank you so much for being such an endearing friend to me.


  • darkyinsoul
    October 10

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    well done poetess
    love this stanza..

    your rose petals stain
    my keep sake box
    where the past is kept
    under lock and key

    rocked it
    keep up the good work
    thanks for the share
    Darky


  • Jayde1
    October 10

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    wow

    this is an amazing poem...
    beautifully written..
    with strong words with endearing emotion..
    well done for penning this poem..

    its lovely


    Jayde


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    October 9

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    The imagery in this was flooring and the emotion was incredibly vivid. You did a wonderful, beautiful job with this. I loved it.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~

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