sweet static of fantasy
and anticipation
rapid firing amidst
smoke and giggles
you are lightning and thunder
traversing me
emitted through
tears and trembling
you come like an embrace
words morph
into melting hands
sound invades
the softest spaces
where time
has no issue
irrelevant wants
whisper moot secrets
in the dark
eyes closed and spoke your name
projectile spewing thoughts
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much as the lofty daydream
an image of quiet reflecting possibilities, in a crowded setting. It's like one of those semi meaningless glimpses of lusts that prompts a private smile...and then dissapates with a shrug of the shoulders.
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thank you for commenting...very kind of you
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nice free flow
Your use of imagery is truely impressive. i love the way you can write with no DIRECT form but have such a powerful piece anyway. You are truely a gifted writer. Thank you for sharing.
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wow
spoke your name and morpged and melted...intensely crafted.......I drowned in the beauty of this piece -
This is excellent...and the last line is soul searchingly beautiful...I can really identify too
nice write
T
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I like this piece it is very lively and well written. I like the way you have molded these words into pictures that can be easily seen in the readers mind. Great job, keep writing!
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Very nicely done Jen, see you can write, even if you don't think so. This is beautifully done, and you didn't even have to get all abstract on us.
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I like these spewing thoughts lol
wonderfully penned...impressed actually by
this piece, you have it going on poetess
Love
Passionpromise
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