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Back to The Old Meadow



So take me back to the old meadow
down the greenery,
where I shall prove all my pleasure.
I shall enjoy the deep silence and my only remedy shall be nature....
I shall make posies of flowers,
daffodils, tulips, and many others
close to the shallow river where do fall leaves of winter...
take me back to the old meadow
I left peace and life deep inside
Leave me deaf and dumb,
through my eyes everything shall enlighten
and every silent beat shall have its own sound.......
Back to the old meadow
I shall find shepherd of innocence guiding every prisoner to the true path
I shall free my soul,
I shall be face to face to truth
truth which has always escaped from my side.
your melody is so gentle,
though with its aching tune shall remain for all my years
as it's your own music,
it's made from your heart
it puts a colourful hope that enlightens the world
my heart cries as it listens to your heavenly strings....
So take me back to the old meadow
ugliness shall vanish,
and only beauty shall remain
I shall become a tale passing through ages
but nobody shall know pain lying my innermost
I shall pass as a forgotten shadow upon those lost years
Back to the old meadow
where my home is and there
it's built to last forever

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  • Xianaria gold member
    October 12

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    Great imagery throughout! Nicely done!
    (One minor suggestion? You might wish to use a lighter colored background, or a brighter text ~ your beautiful words are getting lost on the page...)

    ~ Tim


    • Enchanted Legacy
      November 5
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      Thanks


      Thanks you for coming and reading my poems and leave such nice comments.

      yours,
      Han


      • abuyi
        November 6

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        I agree with Xianara... this is a wonderful write but your background dosnt appreciate the beauty of this write.