This garnet and black heart flies on crimson wings
Tainted blood dripping to ground
Falling on a scorched earth
Burning with a black flame
Rising on poisoned smoke
This heart flies on a scarred golden wing
Silver and blue chains dragging me down
As a gray curtain drowns me
These are my true colors
Take it or leave it
Author notes
See what a fever does?
Go on. Be honest...I want to know what you REALLY think
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The colors that you have chossen are very intense and it is so different.The metaphors are truly ingenious and I love this poem.You have dine a wonderful job here in this poem.
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I'll take it! Your true colors are wickedly awesome and intense! I think this piece is one of your best yet and I absolutely L-O-V-E it ! You've done a fantastic job Scott! There are lots of creative details and such dark yet lovely imagery! Also I'm not sure if I interpreted this correctly or not but the line "As a gray curtain drowns me" made me think of heavy rain falling down to earth - beating down on us - while the thick clouds it falls from turns the world into a dark gray abyss! I find rain and cloudy skies kind of depressing but I really love dark depressing poetry so to me this is a perfect 10! Well done friend!
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A Colorful Fever
Hmm a fever that brings out your true colors...that makes me think. Anyway away from that topic. You have done a great job here. I like the first part the best. Your details and the usage of the colors is amazing. Good job Scott. Hope you don't get anymore fevers, but if you do...write. :-)
~Nicky
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WOW!
I'm really impressed with this piece
I loooooove your word choice, the imagery here is amazing!
Thanks for sharing
♥ kate
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Daughter of Night
Wow so when you get a fever you write extreme, darks poems like this.
lol nice poem love i like it
your angel,
angel
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A strength like no other, the flight of life endured representing a rare jewel of love for the essence is found when one warmly seeks respectfully and unselfishly to see you, cherishing all facets of the garnet. A gray veil is drawn around poet and reader inviting acceptance of self. Your quill stroking with talent.
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WoW. That is what I think.
The imagery was amazing my friend, I loved it and had an image in my head the whole time I was reading it.
I hope you're okay!
<3
~Kera
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sorry you are not feeling well but I have to say I like this
something strong coming from your misery
descriptive, some flow
wouldnt have any idea it dealt with a fever what so ever unless said
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