she sells seashells by the seashore, while he hatches halibuts at the harbor;
in seven seconds, they secretly steal silhouettes from sunset,
and as the ship sails silently toward sunrise, their tongues touch
Author notes
Prompt: tongue twister
A contest entry
- It's Aloha Friday! Time for a Quickie! by islekine.
700 points, ended October 9, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Suggestions?
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hahhaha bravo!
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Wow...such wonderful alliteration!
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Cool take on that prompt. Whimsical turns sultry. Nice.
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absolutely wonderfully well thought out.
"while he hatches halibuts at the harbor" it's like people never questioned what else occurred at the seashore except for sally picking up those seashells
awesome work here, I REALLY enjoyed reading this piece; thank you SO much for sharing! It made my morning more smile-y.
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you turned something trite and familiar into a work of art - that's magic.
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Wonderful
Oh my you got into the spirit with this one. Great job. Congrats on the silver
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Love it!
Need I say more? thanks for entering! Best wishes in the contest and always!
Write on and on...
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Excellent!!!
This is really good. I tried doing something like it but i couldn't. I've read that alliteration makes you focus on every word. It certainly did here.
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I love "accidental alliteration". (Someone said that mine was accidental; I replied that no, I am quite infamous for it.) 
Good luck in the contest, Sweetie.
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