One man's secret and delight;
a woman and cigarette fill his night.
Scintillating thoughts and whimpered sighs,
sparking heated, breathless cries.
Within the shadows of the night;
curves outlined in a soft, glowing light.
With a gasp he watches her drag the stick;
his excitement grows as smoke swirls thick.
Lips puckered in an exhalation;
adding to his flustered masturbation.
Blowing a seductive smoke-filled kiss;
followed by a slow, guttural hiss.
Smoke clears, revealing smoldering eyes
that ignite pure lust between his thighs.
Setting raging fires, her only goal;
ablaze within a suffering soul.
With pain and pleasure he must follow;
her beautiful mouth now lowered to swallow.
Smoke again exits, but now around his cock;
he trembles out of control, and almost in shock.
Devouring his manhood with animal heat;
this diva gives all until her goal is complete.
Draining him of every drop of essence,
Her hunger met with his acquiescence.
Rising from her lowered stance;
he looks at her in a lustful trance.
She lights up another with grace,
Smiles, blowing more smoke in his face.
In his burning passions untold;
eyes that gaze, and beauty will hold.
Senses heightened to extreme;
steamy scene in his ethereal dream.
Author notes
Fetish Round: liltulip...smoking
A contest entry
- Season 10 (Round 3) by Master Ktulu.
450 points, ended October 28, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
All comments are welcome!
Comments
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exciting
i like very much the description
of voice and motion in this.
a very arrousing writing little flower.
i can clearly see the scene.
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Sultry and hot, an excellent take on what must have been a tough write for you. I find it incredibly hard to envisage smoking as a fetish, maybe because it is a habit of mine. I love the use of rhyme here it added a real rhythm to your write because you have chosen solid and strong rhyme words.
Well done
Score 97/100
Corvus Corone
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thank you so much!
it really tested how i could write about something that i gave up and still come across as an erotic fetish! i appreciate your comments, and the chance to be challenged by this round, looking forward to the next!
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Very well done on this. Hope this did not make you want to light up..lol
spelling/grammar/punctuation- 20
Very well done.
presentation/creativity-20
how well you handled the challenge-20
I think you really did great with your challenge.
"grab me" effect -20
Loved it from start to finish.
overall-20
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Total- 100
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hmm, id only light up if
it was someones particular fetish....giggles
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LOL naughty naughty naughty ;lol
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thanks so much!
this was hard to write because i quit smoking 5 years ago but as you said, anything can be a fetish, so i tried to put my head in a different place to write for this round! glad you enjoyed! -
I quit smoking three weeks ago and I never knew it was a fetish till this round, but I guess anything can be a fetish.
So far all the entries I have read this round has been perfect and again with this piece you have made this judging easy as I really enjoyed reading this.
spelling/presentation=20
how well you handled the challenge=20
grab me=20
presentation=20
overall=20
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oooo so sultry. i love this. never knew this was a fetish!! Wonderful Rhyme!! Good luck!!!
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thanks so much
for the comment! never know what is a fetish anymore lol!
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wow! this was a real real good poem!
beautifully crafted and well thought~
the imagination used was mind blowing and the poem is very catchy .
the flow was very nice and rhyming again was wonderfull!
if i was the owner of the contest i would have had given you a gold trophy .! one of my fav for sure!
well done !
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This was awesome!!! The rhyme was excellent! What spectacular words you have chosen to weave, I think you will do great in this round.
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thanks
so much for your great comment, i never know how my writing is going to be taken but its always good to know I've done a good job...these rounds contests are so much fun!
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When I saw this particular fetish, it brought to my mind some great images. I was really looking forward to seeing what you would come up with. You did not let me down and I think you have done a great job in writing a beautiful piece.
Very best of luck to you in this round!
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thank you!
I was so worried i would not be able to do this fetish because i quit smoking 5 years ago, but i know how fetish turn people on, and i just looked at pics of smoking fetish flavor, and described them with a little flare, thank you so much in confirming that i did it well, glad you enjoyed it!
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