Are you sure you're taking the right course?
Always doing what they tell you to do?
Are you sure you wouldn't prefer to be yourself?
That would be a crazy thought, wouldn't it
For you've always, always followed other people
Too afraid to be an individual
And now you're saying that you are
In fact
An individual
But no you are not
Because you are killing me
In the name of someone else
You're under their control
Doing what they're telling you
Disliking me for being an individual
Disliking me because I have my own mind
Disliking me for not doing what you tell me
At least I'm not brain-dead
At least I don't have a fuckin bullet in my head
Author notes
Written on 10th April 2004 at 03:38
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A contest entry
- *Raneika's Anything Contest* by Ms Raneika.
300 points, ended April 24, 2005, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I love the ending great job overall thanks again Raneika
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wow this is really great, i love how you ended it anywayz great job, keep up the great work and best of luck to you in the contest
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I think I know exactly what you're talking about! yay! i have a friend like that, who calls herself an individual, but she's just doing what everyone else is doing. I quite like this poem...it woke me up! You are very talented! my fave line is 'you are killing me in the name of someone else.' it was very impactful! keep up the awesome work, and good luck in this contest and all else!
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tell me something... who exactly told me to make the decision to get you out of my life?... I think you'll actually find that most people were trying to encourage me to KEEP you around. It is indeed interesting that you still think i am a droid of the human race. Someday, i hope you realise that I am, actually, yes, an individual, not someone who continues with something just to be stubborn about it. No dead horse flogging type thing.
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nice stuff, now the contest is over maybe you could re write it in the manner you'd like, then it would have the impact you were after, thx for entering, dtp
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