Through the tunnels
of her mind
the dreams chased her,
vexation in her
heart she gasps
and hears the screams
of the tortured,
like stabbing knives
within her mind
taunting her as they
call in shrills of anguish.
The way is lost a
lengthened labyrinth,
mixed maze of thoughts
confusing intricacy
like a mouth waiting
to devour her,
the screams follow
cantankerous lines that
bare no remorse.
What’s worse
than the screams
is the laughter
that follows,
it bellows sonorous
at this weakened mind.
The dreams haunt her,
in trance she shakes
binded to the fear
her domicile soul breaks.
By a shore a boiling sea
she weeps but tears are dry.
Like washed up wrecks
that break around her
there's shadows here
so thick and dense,
howling winds that
screech in deafening tones.
She embraces death
upon a final lonely sigh
this end in sight within
the labyrinths of her mind.
A beauty luminous
against black velvet,
as red lightning
flashes in the sky.
Galvanized in this crimson
wake, thunder breaks
in a moment
when everything
falls away but the dark.
She senses her life
is failing, she’s falling.
There’s no more light within
this tunnel, nothing calling.
Sensory perception
diminished. Echoes fade
as a single tear is shed
like a grain of sand.
The shore washes her away...
What did you think
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The picture itself is simply stunning... then your words have given us a captivating narration of what is running through her mind as she is staring at her ultimate demise. I thought this had a beautiful lyrical flow to it that really carried the reader along as she plummeted into her darkness... the ending is simply magnificent. The final line just pulls away as if it should be whispered as she drifts off in the waters. Brilliant as always!
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Great stuff...
Smooth, flowing narrative with wonderful imagery & depth...
Impressive as always...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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creative and rich imagery. I love the verse:
"Like washed up wrecks
that break around her
there's shadows here
so thick and dense,
howling winds that
screech in deafening tones"
great write!
(boring bit: 7th verse/2nd line lonley=lonely -then it would be absolutely perfect!)
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Oh what it is to be washed away by the shore and the ocean, the tunnel fades to black and life is nothing more than a cosmic grain.
Most excellent poem and collaboration, you two are making some amazing poetry together you know.
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wow wow wow
this is a beautiful and dark poem
of deep inner turmoil and suffering....
i enjoyed writing this poem with you..
i look forward to our next collab
as always
i love you loads wifey
Jayde
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