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HOLY
quiescent
Heaven
Sent

Irrefutable
Metaphysical Empirical
Purple Sighs
. . .

Benediction
Darts of Lies
pinned
Truth
to
Nightmare splintered Cries
Spear of Fear
Thrust with Lust
Through Love's Tender
Heart
When Treachery answered Loyalty
There in Dust Betrayed
Was Trust . .

Dread
not Truth that
then Bled for
after Tears were
shed
'
and Valediction read
arose from Cracked and
Blooded
Earth
now Moistened Red
a Greater Glory than a Rose
that Grew and
Flooded
Irresistable Invincible

Imperial Ethereal

Filling
Filling
with
   Blue–Bright
Spilling
Flame
So many claim
some
little fire
of their own
the same
Who with Death
Dream and Conspire
to Forfeit their
True
Gift of Life
Entire
for
Bitterness and Strife
in Earthbound empire
But Few then
Rent & Sent

Mystical
Metaphysical Empirical
Irrefutable

Purple Sighs
. . .

Heaven Spent
for All Cries
in

Ωne

'

 

 

(9-28-1986)

© Gennelle Marie

Author notes

[This was not written so much by me, as through me.]

Some significant references re symbolism (found after writing):
colors: Exodus 26:31 (also 28:5,8,15,33)
fire/flame: Isaiah 10:17 ; 50:11 & Heb.1:7

Written September 28, 1986

Posted April 9th, 2004

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  • background music
    April 17, 2008

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    I have goose bumps! This peice was so symbolic and profound ... and I have to say I love the formatting and structure I think the way you presented this poem worked very well in portraying your message here. I will read this again in the morning.


  • Kari gold member
    April 17, 2008

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    I had to come back and read this again
    Such powerful statements throughout the entire poem that it gives one chills. This poem should leave a very powerful imprint on whomever reads it.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    April 1, 2007

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    Powerful Piece

    I like and enjoyed how this was very thought provoking...You used some key words that would make one think this was penned through you..and the spirit within you has drew this reader into the write with each passing line. Thanks for sharing, and this helped me, I appreciate that, and may all you do continue to be blessed! Much love, Timothy aka poeticweaver~


  • Phineas Red
    April 1, 2007

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    This was amazing. Pure flow, pure beats, strong internal rhymes, everything was amazing, it sounded almost like something i would hear at def poetry jam.

    great job,
    really, i'm not sure what else i can say.


  • duana
    April 1, 2007
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    ha I commented on this before- I had to come back and check. Not only has the aha experience NOT come, but I have degenerated!


  • duana
    April 1, 2007

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    The only thing I understand in this is the pain, and for those of us who only understand pain, it's pretty hopeless. I am glad to see you writing and I am sure there is a ton of meaning to this for those on your wavelength!


  • suseann
    April 1, 2007
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    Thought Provolking


  • suseann
    April 1, 2007

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    Astute eye to find cryptic messages hidden in plain sight. I only wish myself more familar with bible verse to fully understand this. That which I do,was in it's self a beautifully relayed thought.As to the structure of it as a work. It flows well.This is one of those pieces that will require my feble mind to reread over a few times to sink in compleatly.So,bookmarked it is. Yet would of been anyway do to the importance of having been first,written by my friend. And secondly because I'm certain there is an impoortant message involved in here.Deeper than deep Maat.Ambrosia of the Gods evident.LOL~Suseann


  • Andi.
    April 1, 2007
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    I actually liked this!
    Good job Maat


    Coop


  • Heart Sutra
    April 1, 2007
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  • Trueheartforlife
    March 31, 2007
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    Great

    Wow amazing poem I love how you used bold words to emphisize emotion. Also it flowed really well you never felt like you wanted to pause you just wanted to read and read. The 7th stanza was the one that really spoke to me. Great job continue to write poems like theese!!


  • Frozentearz
    March 31, 2007
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    So much to ponder within this one that I re-read it,
    an amazing job of making me think through your words,
    I am glad I stopped by,
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz


  • Whenitefallz
    March 31, 2007

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    Beautiful. .

    And so it goes. . . So many meanings to be read within this tapestry, yet none shall I name least I weaken it's intent with personal interpretation. But I got it ~ know it is so.. Selah. . .

  • Trueheartforlife
    March 31, 2007
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    Great

    THe Flow and choice of words was stunning!!


  • Lactar Wolfgang
    March 31, 2007

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    nicely written poem. I love the flow and feel of this peice. It is dalive with emotion and a feeling of almost urgenacy. I had to reread it Knock at the door. A brillant write. Beautiful


  • Romily
    March 25, 2007
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    Sweet one


  • MysticAngelEyes
    March 23, 2007
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    Wow that was incredible such a lovley use of wrods put together. I like the styl eit's in makes it so alluring. Very nicely written


  • Kari gold member
    March 11, 2007
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    Wow this is beyond incredible..and once again I am stuck at how to exactly comment lol...as always
    I love reading your old poems..it's really amazing to see them and where u are now..

    Kari


  • Vickie J
    April 18, 2006
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    When you added the note that this poem wasn't so much written by you, but through you-I could so identify with what you were saying. This had to come up from the very debths of your soul. I'd like to hear this on audio, and just close my eyes and experience it. A wonderful phenomenal write-excellent!~vj
    Best wishes in this difficult contest-so many good entries-wow!


  • lindadoster
    April 16, 2006
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    Beautiful


  • Elfin
    April 12, 2006
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    I am not sure that I fully understand this piece of work, it has left me wondering if I am the Christian that I thought I was. Anyway well done and good luck in the contest.Val.


  • Maatkara gold member
    April 12, 2006
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    Thank you, Dennis! I wouldn't have thought it "New Age" exactly, but certainly universal - as all things spiritual really are.


  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    April 12, 2006
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    Amazing!

    Gen, Wow, New age praise for life and the qualities that bless it! Amazing! Dennis :^)


  • Maatkara gold member
    March 4, 2006
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    Aaah, I knew you would see and tap some of the levels of this paradigm-paradox Lyn! Thank you!

    Although I am very familiar with Donne, I don't actually know Hopkins and only a little of Yeats. The symbolism is archetypal and has evidently been used by the best.



    ~Gen


  • Lyndon gold member
    March 4, 2006
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    I simply wonder & wonder ...

    This poem does not have to be about the eternal presence of Christ waiting for that conception, that spreading of the Word; that conviction in others' hearts; that execution; that Resurrection in Spirit. The paradox of being conquered to conquer. But, it is the Truth that is conceived, often abused, killed off and buried and this often with bloodshed and then the Renaissance of Truth, its indestructible nature in the tribe of man from eternal depths unto eternity returned. Diction: I liked the latent power in "quiescent"; the antithesis of "Metaphysical" and "Empirical"; "Treachery answered loyalty". Most of all I loved the poem within a poem:
    Holy,Heaven-sent benediction;
    Truth - Love's heart; Dust,
    Truth bled tears,
    Valediction blooded Earth, moistened,
    Glory grew - flooded!
    Filling, filling ...
    Blue-bright spilling flame;
    True gift, Life,
    few rent & sent
    Mystical, Heaven spent
    All ... one!

    This is a complex poem which, when unlocked, carries great weight. Very much like a latter day Gerard Manley Hopkins and Yeatsian with the suggestion of the multifoliate and inviolate Rose so spiritually symbolic for him.

    The essence of the twinned poems seems to be Yeatsian again in that we are all part of the sea and wisdom of humanity: his "spiritus mundi". Also, Donnesque - in that we are all a part of the main (blood soaked or not). If one man dies we all feel that as no man is an island entire unto itself.
    Dear Gennelle, I feel that I have only tapped into this poem. You are capable of more economical writing than anyone I have read, I think. In case people think that I have not read much , if you have understood my comment you will know that that is untrue. Lyndon.


  • cafegroundzero gold member
    January 29, 2006
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    Watch out, she has a bright aura!

    Whoa! Dude, this is so deep!

    Man, or er... womyn, I'd take off my hat to you, were I wearing it.

    Ummm... awesome! You must've been touched by an Angel.


  • MargaretG
    January 2, 2006
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    I don't know how I missed it before, Gen. Now this is clearly about the mysteries of incarnation and resurrection. Glory be!


  • Maatkara gold member
    January 1, 2006
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    Thank you, Suseann! Yes, that is the essence indeed. All are interconnected, and those who get to See are obligated to share that Light.


  • suseann
    January 1, 2006
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    Beautiful expressed feelings of ill spent purpose of some.What this dulled slow spirit gleened in a single message of one line standing out for me was.Your saying,that not one solitary life is of importance in and of it's self.But as a fraction dew drop in a great sea of all life it is paramount.Hope I followed.~~Suseann


  • ColinSJones
    December 24, 2004
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    irrefutable

    wow this is a very graphic depiction of the crucifixtion ...move over mel gibson ..gennelle is in town

  • Maatkara gold member
    December 6, 2004
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    Thank you, Mary! I was more the pen in the hand of Spirit for this one.

    ~ G


  • M.A.King
    December 6, 2004
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    So much went through me as I read this again and again. I think your description of a 'mirror' is just about perfect for this piece. I think it will mean much to some. Not to be read but absorbed and reflected...and not a work for the mind but the spirit. Your poem was an added light to my meditation this morning.


  • Sharon Corr gold member
    September 30, 2004
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    Heaven Sent

    I feel the same
    wrapped in one flame
    our love remains eternal, as the swirling sea
    within the precious rare gifts of freedoms eternal peace

    reality has many points but few we see as right
    dreams though on the other hand give us our path and light
    what is a dream today
    could be alive tomorrow

    even when we lose our way our dreams can ease our sorrows
    I tell you that we touched
    you know I wouldn't lie
    it really meant so much you see to take you in the sky
    for me there's wings for everyone
    for with you I see and feel the power of the sun.

    Inscribed in 1986



  • duana
    July 13, 2004
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    The message is similar, the style is similar, but something is very different about this poem than the others. first reading it almost borders on the dark interspersed with light. Yup gonna have to think about this one. This one passes my mind, and staight PAST the heart,lol Yeah, um, it's one of those that you'll have an AHA experience after it sits with you awhile.


  • dark search
    May 14, 2004
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    im speechless again...and again my words cant do ur poems justice...it is like you wrote this poem in meditation...on another level....thus on a level i can understand and agree with this...but on this level i cant comprehand... similar to the feeling you get when ur trying to remember something...it there u can almost touch it..just as u do it falls away

    will put u on my fav's
    dark search


  • Maatkara gold member
    April 16, 2004
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    Bless you, Margaret! I call this one my 'magic mirror', it shows you your heart... what you bring to it...


  • MargaretG
    April 16, 2004
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    Tour de force!

    This is a very moving poem, which bypasses my mind and goes straight to my heart. I hope the mind will catch up later, this is very good! The typesetting (while tedious) heightens the visual impact with an emotional punch.
    If you have to do a poem like this again, save it in a text file, and tinker away, then paste it here.


  • Naughtygrlred
    April 12, 2004
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    woah

  • skinwalker 2
    April 10, 2004
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    Stunning ~~~Applaus~eeeee!!

    Well ,,Maatkara you know I love your work <<smiles<< ..
    "BENEDICTION
    Darts of Lies
    pinned TRUTH to
    Nightmare splintered Cries
    Spear of Fear
    Thrust with Lust
    Through LOVE'S Tender
    HEART"

    ~still my beating heart~~ As always I dance beneath you in the land of the Cherokee Sun ...I am Skinwalker ..~ok <<smiles<< Tom

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